Writing exercise 0401
Neal's father, James, was charged <em>with </em>murder 30 years ago, Ellen was his colleague. <em>She</em> is the first person who saw James with a <em>dead</em> man <em>lying</em> <em>[--> to lie, not to lay] </em>on the ground, James <em>was holding </em>a gun. Ellen didn't believe that James was the <em>murderer</em>, so she <em>collected</em> evidence and found that there <em>were</em> a lot of dirty cops in the bureau. Before she got enough evidence, James confessed. So Ellen and Neal were protected by a plan called WITSEC. Ellen changed her name and <em>hid</em>, and she kept collecting evidence for 30 years.
Ellen was murdered after she came back to New York. Neal got Ellen'<em>s</em> message <em>saying </em>that all the evidence she collected was in a box, she <em>hid</em> the box in <em>the </em>Empire State Building, <em>50th</em> floor.
Neal found out James and asked <em>[for]</em> his help for making a plan to get the box. James agreed.
Though <em>the</em> Empire State Building has very strict security <em>checks</em>, Neal managed to locate where the box <em>was</em> by using a metal scanner because <em>that was</em> a metal box.
Before they <em>took </em>action, they found corruption evidence about James murder case <em>leading</em> to a senator and the senator <em>knew</em> they <em>were</em> investigating. The senator <em>wanted</em> to get the box ahead <em>of </em>Neal, then <em>[--> therefore/consequently/because of that] </em>things <em>got</em> complicated.
The result is James <em>shot</em> the senator and <em>ran</em>. Neal <em>got</em> the box and <em>found</em> that his father <em>was</em> the <em>murderer</em>.
This is the story from "White Collar", season 4.
<em>I've always been a fan of legal thrillers like this one :)</em>