Big Wolf Big Wolf was a black dog, he was about the size of a large wolf but so gentle and so friendly. I know he missed his life before my niece moved back home, those lazy sunny days with no one ch

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Big Wolf Big Wolf was a black dog, he was about the size of a large wolf but so gentle and so friendly. I know he missed his life before my niece moved back home, those lazy sunny days with no one chasing after him. when my niece was about two years old, could barely run, and she loved to chase after Big Wolf, at first Big Wolf loved to play with her, but she was so small, a slightly move would swept her down and made her cry, then my father might gave him a good scolding. after been scolded for 2-3 times, he started his escapist life, every time he saw my niece coming, he just jumped up and ran far away from her like a crazy cat, even if he was enjoying his favorite sunbathing. he had the great sensor of knowing the trouble is coming. we miss you.

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Big Wolf

Big Wolf was a black dog. He was about the size of a large wolf, but so gentle and friendly.
I know he missed his life before my niece moved back home, those lazy sunny days with no one chasing after him. When my niece was about two years old and could barely run, she loved to chase after Big Wolf. At first, Big Wolf loved to play with her, but she was so small, a slight move would knock her down and make her cry. Then my father would give Big Wolf a good scolding. After been scolded 2 or 3 times, he started his escapist lifestyle. Every time he saw my niece coming, he would jump up and run far away from her like a crazy cat, even if he was enjoying his favorite activity: sunbathing. He had a great sensor for knowing that trouble was coming.
We miss you.

It's very well written, but it ends abruptly without saying why you miss Big Wolf; did he escape and never return one day? Don't leave your reader wondering ;) Good job!

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