Important things
It's time to wake up, today will be a hard long day, like yesterday and tomorrow. Nobody is going to do the things for you, you are alone in this and only you can do the necessary for achieving your goals, your dreams. But, in the whole, it doesn't matter how much effort you have to do every day, because the most important things in life are the things you can not control. Family, friends, you have to try to enjoy of them every day, because they are part of your memory, you are made of pieces of them and, trust on me when I tell you that even if you are the strongest woman or men in the world, a little thing can change the things forever. So, do your best and enjoy the little things every day!
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Important Things
It's time to wake up, today will be a hard, long day, like yesterday and tomorrow. Nobody is going to do the things for you, you are alone in this and only you can do the what is necessary for achieving to achieve your goals, your dreams. But, in on the whole, it doesn't matter how much effort you have to do expend/exert every day, because the most important things in life are the things you can not control. Family, friends, you have to try to enjoy of them every day, because they are part of your memory, you are made of pieces of them and, trust on me when I tell you that even if you are the strongest woman or men man in the world, a little thing can change the things forever. So, do your best and enjoy the little things every day!Other Comments:
1) "can not" is OK, but it is much more usual to say "cannot."
2) Excellent job. Your style of writing is quite poetic, and I did not want to meddle with your phrasing too much. For example, the first sentence really should be two sentences, in my opinion. "It's time to wake up. Today will be a hard, long day, like yesterday and tomorrow." However, because the style of your writing was effective at communicating your ideas, I did not think that making too many technical changes was appropriate.
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