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How will u impact one of the coolest communities in the world? Hi guys ! I'm answering a question and here is my draft. Would you kindly have a look and tell me how can I improve it? Whether you happen to come across a gramma error or you think some examples could be told in a better way, don't hesitate, just tell me! 1000THANKs^_−☆ Firstly, I have worked in a fin-tech startup project (at meritco services) and also discussed a lot with a friend, who works in Number26, a Berlin based creative bank account services firm. In X, I would like to connect with people holding the same view. As technology, analytics and data converge, sharper insights can be created in a different way. Together we can dig more deeply into the “mind-machine” relationship in the future consulting as well as finance world, and perhaps draw a new business story from data engineering. Further more, as a member of TECC and AIESEC, I have met many students running start-ups or working in NGOs. I want to draw attention to these organizations and start-ups, as they actually connect tightly to business practice and the emerging markets. As far as I know, the “impact consulting” club in X focuses on social responsibility and consultancy. I would like to join them and seek opportunities of further cooperation between impact consulting and other more “Asian based” organizations. For those who may pursue a career in VC or consulting, it would also be a valuable experience, dealing with start-ups around the world. I do believe that X community, with its rich and profound professional knowledge, can truly make a difference during various social consultancies, while also benefit itself. Finally, while studying in Tsinghua University, I noticed that although it embraced a truly international environment, the communication between different regional groups was relatively limited. A friend and I founded a club, which succeeded in bringing people together. At the same time, I accumulated lots of experiences of working with international students to organize events and activities. An eye on this program’s class profile, there is huge diversity too. I would like to help people who would like to share their own cultures and people who want to learn more about them. People getting involved in out-of-lectureroom, social activities without being held back by cultural background, making friends besides just studying or working together, I will try my best to make these simple things easier for the X community.

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How will u impact one of the coolest communities in the world?

Hi guys ! I'm answering a question and here is my draft. Would you kindly have a look and tell me how can I improve it?
Whether you happen to come across a gramma error or you think some examples could be told in a better way,
don't hesitate, just tell me! 1000THANKs^_−☆
Firstly, I have worked in a fin-tech start-up project (at meritco services) and also discussed a lot with a friend, who works [a lot of friend = plural = work] in Number26, a Berlin based creative bank account services firm. In X, I would like to connect with people holding the same view. As technology, analytics and data converge [data convergence], sharper insights can be created in a different way. Together we can dig more deeply into the “mind-machine” relationship in the future consulting [?]as well as finance world, and perhaps draw a new business story from data engineering.

Further more, as a member of TECC and AIESEC, I have met many students running start-ups or working in NGOs. I want to draw attention to these organizations and start-ups, as they actually connect tightly to business practice and the emerging markets. As far as I know, the “impact consulting” club in X focuses on social responsibility and consultancy. I would like to join them and seek opportunities of further cooperation between impact [of] consulting and other more “Asian based” organizations. For those who may pursue a career in VC or consulting, it would also be a valuable experience, dealing with start-ups around the world. I do believe that X community, with its rich and profound professional knowledge, can truly make a difference during various social consultancies, while also benefit itself.

Finally, while studying in Tsinghua University, I noticed that although it embraced [embraces] a truly international environment, the communication between different regional groups was relatively limited. A friend and I founded a club, which succeeded in bringing people together. At the same time, I accumulated lots of experiences of working with international students to organize events and activities. An eye on this program’s class profile, there is huge diversity too. I would like to help people who would like to share their own cultures and people who want to learn more about them. People ['were', past s] getting involved in out-of-lectureroom, social activities without being held back by cultural background, making friends besides just studying or working together, I will try my best to make these simple things easier for the X community.

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