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Dream
If you have a dream, protect it.
—— The pursuit of happiness
Everyone would have some dreams about their future job when they were just a child, for example, to be a policeman, a teacher, or a scientist, etc. After they grew up, they would more mature to choose a job according to some objective factors. Some will still pursue their dreams although they can't do it now.
I also have some dreams in my different stages of age. Recently I'm obsessed by writing. Originally I just want to improve my English ability. Then I found that it is a good approach to not only raise my English level, but also share my ideas with others here. Furthermore when you get some supports and encouragements from others, it will give you more power and confidence to insist in fulfilling your dream. The invention of the Internet which connects people from different corners of the world provide a good platform for us to communicate and know each other's opinions in some fields and therefore increase our own outlook after absorbing various viewpoints.
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Could you help me to correct the following article? Thank you!
DreamIf you have a dream, protect it.
—— The pursuit of happiness
Everyone would have some dreams about their future job when they were just a child, for example, to be a policeman, a teacher, or a scientist, etc. However after growing up, they would more mature to and began to choose a job according to some various objective factors. Some will may still pursue their dreams job although they can't do it now.(needs clarification)
I also had some dreams in my throughout my different stages of age ("Life" would sound better.) . Recently I'm I have been obsessed by with writing. Originally I just wanted to improve my English ability. Then I found that it is was a good approach to not only raise advance my English level, but also share my ideas with others on here. Furthermore when you get some supports and encouragements from others, it will give you more power and confidence to insist in on fulfilling your dreams. The invention of the Internet, which connects people from different corners of the world provide a good platform for us to communicate and know each other's opinions in some fields and therefore increase our own outlook after absorbing various viewpoints.
(Good Job! Keep it up!) :)
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Could you help me to correct the following article? Thank you!
DreamIf you have a dream, protect it.
—— The pursuit of happiness
Everyone would have some dreams about their future job when they were just a child, for example, to be a policeman, a teacher, or a scientist, etc. After they grew up, they would be more mature to choose a job according to some objective factors. Some will still pursue their dreams although they can't do it now.
I also have some dreams in my different stages of age. Recently I'm obsessed by with writing. Originally I just wanted to improve my English ability. Then I found that it is a good approach to not only raise my English level, but also share my ideas with others here. Furthermore when you get some supports and encouragements from others, it will give you more power and confidence to insist in fulfilling your dream. The invention of the Internet which connects people from different corners of the world provide a good platform for us to communicate and know each other's opinions in some fields and therefore increase our own outlook after absorbing various viewpoints.
1
Could you help me to correct the following article? Thank you!
DreamIf you have a dream, protect it.
—— The pursuit of happiness
Everyone would have some dreams about their future job when they were just a child, for example, to be a policeman, a teacher, or a scientist, etc. After they grew up, they would more mature to choose a job according to some objective factors. Some will still pursue their dreams although they can't do it now.
I also have some dreams in my different stages of age. Recently I'm obsessed by with writing. Originally I just want to improve my English ability. Then I found that it is a good approach to not only raise my English level skills, but also share my ideas with others here. Furthermore, when you get some supports and encouragements from others, it will give you more power and confidence to insist in fulfilling your dream. The invention of the Internet which connects people from different corners of the world provide a good platform for us to communicate and know each other's opinions in some fields and therefore increase our own outlook after absorbing various viewpoints.
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