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Please help me to make my English better! Thank you for your help alwasy! This time I wrote about my eating habit and reflected upon the result. Any correction is appreciated! My biggest concern after I analyzed my nutrition intake is high average intake of sodium. My average intake is 3798 mg which means 65% more than UL. My first thought about the reason for excess amount of sodium is Japanese food I eat every day, since I was born. I grew up with salty dishes with white rice and salty soup of udon or ramen noodle. For example, I eat miso soup 1-2 bowls every day and Japanese food also need soy source for every dish. It made me wonder if Japanese people consume more sodium than western people, and if so, I would like to learn the good way to reduce sodium in Japanese food to benefit my culture. I also realized that I took magnesium more than UL, but it is close to UL, so a little bit of awareness for magnesium will make the level under UL. I need to keep super tracker a little longer to see if it is just temporary for the three days. Among the nutrients I could not meet the recommended amount, I agree with the result of vitamin C deficit, when I reflect my every day meal. I reflect upon not enough fresh fruit and vegetables in my meals for so long. Fiber is also lacking in my daily meal regularly. These are something I need to work on to solve the problems; 1) add a late of fruit and vegetables and 2) replace white rice with brow rice. My personal experience of supertracker is very beneficial. I am lucky to know my way too high sodium intake, before I start to show any serious sodium related diseases. Prevention is always the best treatment, and I can take an action to improve my diet from now on. I would like to let my family or friends know the importance of tracking their nutrients in meals.

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Please help me to make my English better!

Thank you for your help alwaysy!
This time I wrote about my eating habits and reflected upon the results.*
Any correction is appreciated!

My biggest concern after I analyzed my nutritional intake is the high average daily intake of sodium. My average intake is 3798 mg which means 65% more than the UL recommendation. My first thought about the reason for excess amount of sodium is the Japanese food I have eaten every day, since I was born. I grew up with salty dishes with white rice and salty soup of udon or ramen noodle. For example, I eat miso soup 1-2 bowls every day and Japanese food also need uses a lot of soy source for every dish. It made me wonder if Japanese people consume more sodium than western people, and if so, I would like to learn the good way to reduce sodium in Japanese food to benefit my culture. I also realized that I consume more took magnesium more than the UL recommendation, but it is close to UL, so a little bit of awareness for about magnesium will make bring the level under UL. I need to keep super tracker a little longer to see if it is just temporary for the three days.
Among the nutrients for which** I could not meet the recommended amount, I agree with the result of vitamin C deficit***, when I reflect on my every day meals. I reflect**** upon not enough fresh fruit and vegetables in my meals for so long. Fiber is also lacking in my daily meal regularly. These are something of the things I need to work on to solve the problems; 1) add a late lot of fruit and vegetables and 2) replace white rice with brown rice.
My personal experience of supertracker is has been very beneficial. I am lucky to know my way too high sodium intake I was fortunate to learn about my high sodium intake before I start beganto show any serious sodium related diseases. Prevention is always the best treatment, and I can take an action to improve my diet from now on. I would like to let my family or friends know the importance of tracking their nutrients in meals.

Sunny-san, You are writing about very technical subjects. It's quite interesting. Some of the corrections I have made are advanced. 

UL is the Underwriters Lab recommendations? I wasn't sure. Also, if "supertracker" is a specific product, you should capitalize the first letter of the name.

* I more professional way to say this is: "This time I have written about . . . and have reflected on the results." 

** "for which" is a complicated English grammar pattern. "For which, "from which," "to which," and "of which" are all very similar. In each case, the word "which" represents the topic of the sentence (in this case, nutrients). So "for which" means "of the nutrients that I scored low on, vitamin C was one."  

*** "deficit" - "deficiency" might be more correct.

**** "reflect" - you use this word too often. Here, you could say, "I believe that I haven't been eating enough fresh fruits and vegetable . . ." or "Under consideration, I have not been eating enough . . ." 

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Please help me to make my English better!

Thank you for your help alwasy! always
This time I wrote about my eating habits and reflected upon the result.
Any correction is appreciated!

My biggest concern after I analyzed my nutrition intake, is my high average intake of sodium. My average intake is 3798 mg which means 65% more than UL. My first thought about the reason The first thought that occurred to me as to why I had such for excessive amount of sodium is, because I eat Japanese food every day, since I was  the day I was born. I grew up eating salty dishes with white rice and salty soup of udon or ramen noodle. For example, I would eat miso soup 1-2 bowls every day and add a soy source since all japanese dishes have it. Japanese foods also need soy source for every dish. It made me wonder if Japanese people consume more sodium than western people, and if so, I would like to learn a good way to reduce sodium intake in Japanese dishes to benefit my culture. I also realized that I had a higher magnesium intake than UL, but it is close to my UL;  a little bit of awareness about my magnesium, I'll will have to make it go   under my UL. I need to keep super tracker a little while longer, to see if it is just temporary for the three days.
Among other nutrients I could not meet the recommended amount, I agree with where the result of vitamin C deficit. When I reflected upon my every day meals, I noticed that I hadnt eaten enough fresh fruit and vegetables for so long. Fiber is also lacking in my daily meals. These are somethings I need to work on to solve the problems; 1) add a  fruit and vegetable, 2) replace white rice with brown rice.
My personal experience with supertracker was very beneficial. I am lucky to know that my sodium intake was high, before I developed any serious sodium related diseases. Prevention is always the best treatment, and I can take action to improve my diet from now on. I would like to let my family or friends know the importance of tracking their nutrients in meals.


I highlighted some words because, I think they can be modified, but I can't think of something at the moment 

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