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Hokusai Museum The world-famous Ukiyo-e artist “Katsushika Hokusai”, who is said to have influenced Van Gogh. It is said that he spent his life almost in Sumida Ward, and the “Sumida Hokusai Museum” is opened in 2016, in order to exhibit his highly valued works in the world. The museum is bit far from train stations, but it is worth seeing because the building has its own innovative design and the building itself can be said, a part of works. The park is in front of the entrance and it is a place for citizens to relax. The details of his works are translated in four languages ​​including English by the touch-panel display which offers profound insights into his works. Unfortunately, all of the exhibits are replicas and the inside of the hall is not very large. There are not so many tourists from overseas country as I thought. Honesty, you might disappointed when you visit. Although you can take pictures of the works inside the building, using flash is prohibited. Since some works are forbidden to take pictures, please be sure to follow instructions from staff.

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Hokusai Museum

The world-famous Ukiyo-e artist “Katsushika Hokusai”, who is said to have influenced Van Gogh.
It is said that he spent his life almost entirely in Sumida Ward, and the “Sumida Hokusai Museum” is opened in 2016, in order to exhibit his highly valued works into the world. ("He" is a little ambiguous here.  It could refer to "Van Gogh" you might want to reiterate "Katsushika Hokusai" instead of that "he")

The museum is a bit far from train stations(from the train station" sounds better, or "from the train stations" maybe), but it is worth seeing because the building has its own innovative design and the building itself can be said, a part of works. (If Katsushika san built or designed the building, then you could say "can be said to be a part of his works".  If not, the sentence is a little ambiguous and something besides "works" should be used since "works" implies the "work" of Katsushika san)

The park is in front of the entrance and it is a place for citizens to relax.

The details of his works are translated into four languages (or written in four, "into" because "translate" is from one language into another), ​​including English, by the touch-panel display which offers profound insights into his works.

Unfortunately, all of the exhibits are replicas and the inside of the hall is not very large. There are not so many tourists from overseas countries (or you could just say "...from overseas as I...")as I thought. (A little awkward "as I had thought" would mean that you thought before that there were many tourists from overseas but this was not the case.  "as I would think" would mean that you are surprised and would think that more tourists from overseas would visit, but that you didn't previously have any preconceptions about it.) Honesty, you might be disappointed when you visit.

Although you can take pictures of the works inside the building, using a flash is prohibited. Since taking pictures of some works areis forbidden to take pictures, please be sure to follow instructions from staff.
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Hokusai Museum

The world-famous Ukiyo-e artist “Katsushika Hokusai”, who is said to have influenced Van Gogh.
It is said that he spent most of his life almost in Sumida Ward, and the “Sumida Hokusai Museum” is opened in 2016, in order to exhibit his most highly valued works in the world.

The museum is bit quite far from train stations, but it is worth seeing because the building has its own innovative design and the building itself can be said, a is considered to be part of the works.

The park is in front of the entrance and it is a lovely place for citizens to relax.

The details of his works are translated into four languages ​​including English by the touch-panel display, which offers profound insights into his works.

Unfortunately, all of the exhibits are replicas and the inside of the hall is not very large. There are not so many tourists from overseas country countries as I thought. Honesty, you might be slightly disappointed when you visit.

Although you can take pictures of the works inside the building, using flash is prohibited. Since some works you are forbidden to take pictures of certain work, please be make sure to you follow the instructions from given to you by the staff.

Hi Naoki. Nice article about the world famous Katsushika Hokusai museum! I have corrected your article, here are some suggestions for you:

- Proof read your sentences, to make sure you've used the best possible order of phrases - (a part of works / is considered to be part of the works) - (please be sure to follow instructions from staff / please make sure you follow the instructions given to you by the staff) 

- Use adjectives, where appropriate, to encourage expression and point of view (a place for citizens to relax / a lovely place for citizens to relax)

- Remember, the plural of country is countries!  

Good luck! Teacher Dave.

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