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An Guided Writing As we all know,China suffers from"brain drain" more than other country these days ,although,it has the largest labor.Therefor,the excellent people like students who study abroad are extremely needed in this situation.It's enjoyable for us that more and more students who study abroad choose to come back as 186000 returnees in 2011. from my opinion,it still a good choice to study abroad with a huge cost as if you have advantageous conditions to access it.For instance,some students who has the talents in their fields,they can choose to study abroad with the help of our country for their cost.Because nobody can deny that we can get the advanced education overseas,which is beneficial for people's development in the future.But we shouldn't hope we will achieve our great success after studying abroad,It's just a way you can improve yourself. Briefly,studying abroad is a good opportunity to obtain a high level for people's lives.Anybody can choose it if you think it suits to you.Of course,we can also be succeed through our effort without studying abroad.

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As we all know, China suffers form "Brain drain" more than any other country these days, although it has the largest labor sector.

Therefore, excellent people like students who study abroad are truly needed to balance this situation by returning to China. It´s fortunate for us that more and more students who study abroad choose to come back, for example there were 186,000 returnees in 2011. In my opinion it´s still a good choice to study abroad despite the huge cost, if you have the opportunity. For instance, some students who are talented in their fields can choose to study abroad with the support of the country for its costs. No one can deny that we can get an advanced education overseas, which is beneficial for the persons development in the future. However, you shouldn´t believe that we will achieve success after studying abroad, it is just a way to improve oneself.

Briefly, studying abroad is a good opportunity to achieve a higher level. Anybody can choose it if you think it suits you, of course we can also succeed through our own effort without having to study abroad.

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Here is my correction. Let me know if you would like to understand why I made some of the changes here. One easy change is to have a space after every period and comma. A Guided Writing As we all know, China suffers from "brain drain" more than any other country these days, although it has the largest labor force. Therefore, excellent people like students who study abroad are truly needed to balance this situation by returning to China. It's fortunate for us that more and more students who studied abroad, chose to come back as 186,000 returnees in 2011. In my opinion, it’s still a good choice to study abroad despite the huge cost, if you have the opportunity. For instance, some students who have talent in their field can choose to study abroad with the help of our country for their cost. No one can deny that we can get an advanced education overseas, which is beneficial for people's development in the future. However, you shouldn't believe that we will achieve our greatest success after studying abroad. It's just a way you can improve yourself. Briefly, studying abroad is a good opportunity to achieve a higher level. Anybody can choose it if you think it suits to you. Of course, we can also succeed through our own efforts without studying abroad.

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