First notebook entry: Introducing myself
I want to learn English because i think it is a nessary for my finding a job, for my trvalling in English-spoken countries, for my interests.
As English is becoming a toll for us, i have to learn it well to master the skill, also, for graduation.
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
I want to learn English because I think it is a necessary for1. One of the meanings of toll is "burden" which is used incorrect here. I am sure you are trying to say the opposite. Next time you can write in Chinese since I can read and understand some Chinese so that I get a better idea of what you are trying to express.
2. You told the reader earlier that you want to learn English because it is important to look for a job, to travel and because you like it. Now suddenly you are telling you needed it for graduation which is an immediate need. This gives the impression to the reader that your lofty and grand ideas in the beginning are not really true. By changing it to the way I write and adding a smiley informs the readers as you are in a joking manner "pulling their legs" (to tease). This makes the mood lighter and does not convey any insincerity. Translate to Chinese and I'm sure you understand what I mean.
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