Quite place
The Jiuzi Park turned up by accident, in a evening when I really needed a break from the long distance cycling.
The name of Jiuzi shows that the park was donated by the overseas Chinese, and the monument engraved with missing proved it. The park was no much difference from other parks. You would be greeted by pieces of slim and green bamboos as soon as you go in. Some common fitness equipment are arranged neatly between trees. In addition, the park was close to the overpass, so you could see many buses and big trucks coming and going, easily producing an illusion of space-time interweaving.
Though the park was not much amazing, I felt lucky to discover it.
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A quiet place
The Jiuzi Park(1) turned up by accident, in a evening when I really needed a break from the long distance cycling(1).The name of "Jiuzi" shows that the park was donated by the overseas Chinese(1), and the monument engraved with missing (??) proved it. The park was not much different from other parks. You're greeted by pieces of slim, green bamboo as soon as you enter(2). Some typical fitness equipment is(3) arranged neatly between trees. In addition, the park is close to the overpass, so you can(3) see many buses and big trucks coming and going, easily producing an illusion of space-time interweaving.
Though the park was not particularly amazing, I felt lucky to discover it.
A nice quick description.
(1) Careful when using 'the'. When we use 'the', it feels *kind of* like saying 這個 / 那個 / 這些 etc. So we don't use it with most place names, or with abstract nouns (long distance cycling), or with general references (overseas Chinese, rather than "the overseas Chinese in Paris"). Yes, you do see it in some place names (the Netherlands, the Philippines), and there are old reasons for this, but it's probably best not to worry about them unless you're really interested.
(2) If you go in somewhere, it kind of sounds like you're going inside. 'enter' feels better here.
(3) You're using a technique where you describe a place using the second person. Unless the place doesn't exist now (e.g. ancient Rome), use the present tense with this technique. Nice style, and appropriate for this piece!
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