My trip in Bali
When summer cicadas wake me up every morning, I blame them for depriving me of my beautiful dreams. In my dreams, I was swimming in a sea that feels like jelly, while around me played a bunch of dolphins.
All of these are based on my true experiences in Bali and it is the first day in Bali that impressed me the most.
It was 4 o'clock in the morning when we arrived at the Lovina Seaside beach. At first, the sky was totally dark and I could only feel the gentle breeze. A few minutes later, several rays of sunlight ripped through the sky, it turned into dark pink, I began to get on board. It struck me with a frightful thought because I was afraid of how cold the water could be（freezing）; however, to my astonishment, the water was so warm that I didn’t hesitate to walk into it.
The ship /i/ looked like a crab - it had one handrail on each /i:/ side of it. In no time, we had arrived far away from the land. (It took no time for us to arrive far away from the land.) The water was tranquil; the sky was beginning to turn red. Suddenly, a team of dolphins jumped out of the water and made a beautiful arc then disappeared into the water. The ship began to chase them while the sky was getting brighter. Those dolphins were so happy that they jumped again and again. There was a little fat one that even did several spins out of the water. When it fell sideways into the water, there was a splash of spray. The boat started its engine and changed direction. After we arrived at a wide area of water, we jumped
into the water - warm as milk, soft as silk and I began snorkeling.
Under the sea, there were various aquatic creatures. The splendid scenery was beyond description.
On that day, I realized life is full of new experiences. I will cherish these opportunities to see the world.
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When summer cicadas wake me up every morning, I blame them for depriving me of my beautiful dreams. In my dreams, I was swimming in a sea that felt like jelly, while around me played a pod of dolphins.
(A group of dolphins is called a pod. A pod usually is formed of around 12 dolphins, and it is the usual social group of dolphins. However, when a group of pods joins in places with an abundance of food, they can reach up to one thousand individuals forming a large group which is called a superpod).
All of These dreams are based on my true real experiences in Bali, and it is the first day in Bali that impressed me the most.
It was 4 o'clock in the morning when we arrived at the Lovina Seaside beach. At first, the sky was totally dark and I could only feel the gentle breeze. A few minutes later, several rays of sunlight ripped through the sky. It slowly turned into a dark pink, and I began toget on board walk towards the boat.
It struck me with a frightful thoughtbecause I was and I became afraid of how cold the water could be. (freezing) However, to my astonishment, the water was so warm that I didn’t hesitate to walk into it.
I hoped into the boat which looked like a crab. It had one handrail on each side of it.
In no time, we hadarrived floated far away from the land, it happened so quickly. (It took no time for us to arrive far away from the land.)
The water was tranquil, the sky was beginning to turn red.
Suddenly, a pod of dolphins jumped out of the water,and made a beautiful arc shape, then disappeared back into the water.
The boat began to chase them while the sky was getting brighter. Those dolphins were so happy that they jumped again and again. There was a little fat one that evendid performed several spins out of the water. When it fell sideways into the water there was a splash. of spray.
The boat started its engine and changed direction.
After we arrived at a wide area of water, we jumped
in,the water which felt as warm as milk and as soft as silk. and I began snorkeling. (You could perhaps extend this sentence by how you snorkled. Did you have equipment for this, did you wear anything?)
Under the sea, there were various aquatic creatures. The splendid scenery was beyond describing.
On that day, I realized ("Realized" American English, "Realised" British English) life is full of new experiences. I will cherish these opportunities to see the world.
(A group of dolphins is called a pod. A pod usually is formed of around 12 dolphins, and it is the usual social group of dolphins. However, when a group of pods joins in places with an abundance of food, they can reach up to one thousand individuals forming a large group which is called a superpod).
It was 4 o'clock in the morning when we arrived at the Lovina Seaside beach. At first, the sky was totally dark and I could only feel the gentle breeze. A few minutes later, several rays of sunlight ripped through the sky. It slowly turned into a dark pink, and I began to
It struck me with a frightful thought
I hoped into the boat which looked like a crab. It had one handrail on each side of it.
In no time, we had
The water was tranquil, the sky was beginning to turn red.
Suddenly, a pod of dolphins jumped out of the water,
The boat began to chase them while the sky was getting brighter. Those dolphins were so happy that they jumped again and again. There was a little fat one that even
The boat started its engine and changed direction.
After we arrived at a wide area of water, we jumped
in,
Under the sea, there were various aquatic creatures. The splendid scenery was beyond describing.
On that day, I realized ("Realized" American English, "Realised" British English) life is full of new experiences. I will cherish these opportunities to see the world.
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My Trip in Bali [In the main title always capitalize the first, last, and all important words.]
When summer cicadas wake me up every morning, I blame them for depriving me of my beautiful dreams. In my dreams, I was swimming in a sea that feels like jelly, while around me played a bunch of dolphins.All of these are based on my true experiences in Bali and it was the first day in Bali that impressed me the most.
It was 4 o'clock in the morning when we arrived at the Lovina Seaside beach. At first, the sky was totally dark and I could only feel the gentle breeze. A few minutes later, several rays of sunlight ripped through the sky as it turned into dark pink and I began to get on board. It struck me with a frightful thought because I was afraid of how cold the water could be (freezing), however, to my astonishment the water was so warm that I didn’t hesitate to walk into it.
The ship looked like a crab - it had one handrail on each side of it. In no time we had gotten far away from the land. (It took no time for us to get far away from the land.) The water was tranquil; the sky was beginning to turn red. Suddenly, a team of dolphins jumped out of the water and made a beautiful arc then disappeared into the water. The ship began to chase them while the sky was getting brighter. Those dolphins were so happy that they jumped again and again. There was a little fat one that even did several spins out of the water. When it fell sideways into the water, there was a splash of spray. The boat started its engine and changed direction. After we arrived at a wide area of water, we jumped into the water - warm as milk, soft as silk and I began snorkeling.
Under the sea, there were various aquatic creatures. The splendid scenery was beyond description.
On that day, I realized life is full of new experiences. I will cherish these opportunities to see the world.
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