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Internet in our lifes. My level 6 set writing (B). Do we need the internet to enjoy life to the full?. Since Internet becomes an usual software in our lives, nothing is how it was. The power of transformation of internet is awesome. Many people thing that is the third industrial revolution. On the one side there are a lot of people, enthusiasts of technologies, who only see the improvement of lots of tasks and processes; and also they only see the ability to keep in contact with others, not matter where or how long they are. If we add that internet also provides a lot of information, we can understand how deep is the impact of IT in our life. On the other side, there are a lot of people who are not so interested on internet. Some of them because their low capacities with new technologies, or because their age, others because they feel that new technologies do not allow a real, deep, direct and reliable relationship. To sum up, I thing that nothing is good or bad in itself. Perhaps the best we can do is using technologies for technical areas, and keep in real contact with others.

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Internet in our lives.

My level 6 set writing (B).

Do we need the Internet to enjoy life to the fullest?

Since the Internet became a commonplace technology in our lives, nothing has been the same. The power of transformation of the Internet is awesome. Many people think that it is the third industrial revolution.

On the one hand, there are a lot of tech enthusiasts who only see the improvement of lots of tasks and processes; and also they only see the ability to keep in contact with others, no matter where or how far away they are. If we add that the Internet also provides a lot of information, it's easy to understand the deep impact of IT in our lives.

On the other hand, there are a lot of people who are not so interested in the internet. Some due to their limited understanding of new technologies, or others because of their age. There are even those who feel that new technologies do not allow real, deep, direct and reliable relationships.

Overall, I don't think that anything is good or bad in itself. Perhaps the best we can do is use technology for technical purposes, and keep in real contact with others.

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Overall, this is a nice essay with some solid points.

One piece of advice is to avoid "we can understand" as I often associate this phrase ability but not choice. "It's easy to see/understand" is a phrase to use instead.


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Internet in our lives.

My level 6 set writing (B).

Do we need the internet to enjoy life to the full?.

Since the Internet (becomes) has become (an) a (usual) commonplace software used in our lives, nothing is how it was before its implementation. The power of transformation (of) via the internet is awesome. Many people (thing) think that it is the third industrial revolution.

On the one side, there are a lot of people, enthusiasts of technology, who only see the improvement of lots of tasks and processes; and also, they only see the ability to keep in contact with others, (not) no matter where or how (long) far away they are. If we add, that the internet also provides a lot of information, we can understand how deep (is) the impact of IT is in our (life) lives.

On the other side, there are a lot of people who are not so interested (on) in the internet. Some of them because of their (low) limited capacities with understanding new technology. (or because their age) Others, because they feel that new technology does not (allow) facilitate  real, deep, direct and reliable relationships.

To sum up, I (thing) think that nothing is good or bad in itself. Perhaps the best we can do is (using) to use technology for technical areas, and keep in real contact with others.

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