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Self introduce Hi, nice to meet you. My English is not very good（I’m still a beginner at English）, but I'll try my best. I was born and raised in Fukuoka until the age of 22, Then, I moved to Tokyo for work. After that I worked for 10 years, and I got married. I'm homemaker now. Because I'm raising two children: a 3-years-old boy and a 2-years-old girl. Child care is very tough, but it’s happy the life with children. I'm hoping to get back in the job when my children become old enough. I've been working as creative director until got marriage. I was designing smartphone apps and social game design. The work was really hard but rewarding. I'm good at drawing. I've always drawn pictures since childhood. In high school and university, I spent a lot of time drawing pictures and studying computer graphics. My best times were spent drawing. That's why I feel relaxed when I draw pictures. That is.Thank you.

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Self Introduction

Hi, nice to meet you.
My English is not very good (I’m still a beginner (1) at English), but I'll try my best.

I was born and raised in Fukuoka until the age of 22. Then, I moved to Tokyo to for work. After that I worked working for 10 ten years, and I got married. I'm have become a homemaker now * — I'm raising two children: a 3-years-old three-year-old boy and a 2-years-old two-year-old girl.
Child care (2) Taking care of my children is very tough, but it’s I'm happy the life being with my children.
I'm hoping to get back in the job into the workforce (3) when my children become old enough.

I've (4) I'd been working as a creative director until I got marriage. I was designing smartphone apps and social games design. The work was really hard but rewarding.

I'm good (1) at drawing. I've always drawn pictures since my childhood.
In high school and university, I spent a lot of time drawing pictures and studying computer graphics.
My best times were spent drawing. That's why I feel relaxed (5) whenever I draw pictures.

That's it! is.Thank you.

Hi Sho, 

I am visiting Kyushu in March and have planned my itinerary around Fukuoka, Kumamoto and Kagoshima. This is my first trip to Japan and I am very excited!

Just some comments to share with you: 

(1) There is nothing wrong with your use of prepositions here. I just want to share that we are good at a skill while we are good in/at a subject. 

* We can use a dash (—) to elaborate or provide more details about something. We can also use a colon (:) to provide more examples or a list of related things. 

(2) "Childcare" is the provision of care for young children in a facility such as a nursery. I presume that you are referring to taking care of your children by yourself. If this is so, I have used a gerund phrase as a subject instead: "Taking care of my children".

(3) We use "workforce" here to refer to the people who are collectively involved in employment in a country or industry. 

(4) "I've been working" is actually in the present perfect continuous tense. You use this if you started working in the past, continued working for a duration, and are still working. As you have stopped working, it should be "I'd been working" (past perfect continuous tense): you use this because you started working in the past, continued working for some time, and stopped working before the present moment. 

(5) I presume that you still draw once in a while. For such recurring actions, we use "whenever"  — regardless of when.

I hope this helps you. 

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Self introduce

Hi, nice to meet you.
My English is not very good（I’m still a beginner at English）, but I'll try my best.

I was born and raised in Fukuoka until the age of 22.
Then, I moved to Tokyo for work.
After that I worked for 10 years, and I got married.
I'm a homemaker now, because I'm raising two children:
a 3-years-old boy and a 2-years-old girl.
Child care Raising children is very tough, but it’s happy the life with children is a happy one.
I'm hoping to get back in the my old job when my children become old enough.

I've been working as a creative director until got marriage.
I was designing smartphone apps and social games design.
The work was really hard but rewarding.

I'm good at drawing.
I've always drawn pictures since childhood.
In high school and university, I spent a lot of time drawing pictures and studying computer graphics.
My best times were spent drawing. Time spent drawing were the best, because That's why I feel relaxed when I'm drawing pictures.

That is.Thank you.

素晴らしい作文でした. 私の趣味も絵を描くことです. 頑張ってね.

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