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IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (QUESTION) Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? (ANSWER) It is considered that an increasing number of people have to apply for the same jobs which young people also want to do. This essay will first explain why the high rate of unemployment it can cause and then give a few solutions such as enlarging the opportunities of jobs by the government and companies and improving our own skills. It will be much more difficult to achieve the dream job and the rate of unemployment will be much higher if this phenomenon continues. The main reason is that companies only hire limited employees and the employer only want to know more about the most talent and knowledgeable interviewer, no matter how old they are. In other words, if a person is over 50 with some serious illness, a young person who gradually finishes college would be much more welcomed. For example, in the fashion and design industry, young people with both good advantages and bodies are more likely to be hired nowadays. Given that situations, the first solution is that we need to encourage both government and companies to offer more opportunities for people. More importantly, a new system that a master teaches a freshman can also be used when we work, which leads people from different ages to achieve their dream jobs. Secondly, we ought to improve ourselves, not only in professional areas but also in communication and negotiation. A recent study shows that HR prefers people who are both talent and easy-talking. In conclusion, even though the job market seems much more competitive after almost all people apply for the same jobs. We definitely need more job opportunities and improve our own abilities.

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Thanks a lot!!! by the way, it is really amazing to get 7.5 on your writing test!
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Hi fellow. I am not a teacher but I took IELTS last year and got 7.5 on the writing test. I will give a look on this text to support you as soon as I can.

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