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a description of perfume I'm trying to describe a perfume notes from first to end... please revise it and help me to make it better. "The combination of violet leaf and grapefruit wakes a sweet and playful morning. During the day, a burst of floral scent is brought out, and finally end up with a hint of tempting musk. Always elegant, always enchanting but not too serious. " thanks^^

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A Description of a Perfume

I'm trying to describe a perfume's notes from top to base.
Please revise it and help me to make it better.

"The combination of violet *leaves and grapefruit wakes you up for a sweet and playful morning. During the day, a burst of floral scent makes an appearance is brought out, and finally #leaves end up with a hint of tempting musk.
Always elegant, always enchanting but not too serious."

Hi Sarah,

I've only tried to substitute certain words or phrases for stylistic effects. For example, I used "makes an appearance" to mean that the middle note was not detectable in the beginning but eventually became noticeable after much anticipation. #Also, I used "leaves" to provide the impression that the base notes are long-lasting and deposited on the body after the top notes have totally evaporated. In this context, "leaves"# is a verb. 

*Here, "leaves" is a noun. I used the plural form as I presume the perfume reminds you of many "leaves", not just one. 

I hope this helps you. 


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