Shana
Living in big cities, such as those first-tier ones, was a common dream to many people in the past. However, as the mass living standards improved, increasing attention to health has gradually become a trend among human beings. More and more people tend to relocate their houses in small cities or in rural areas. Why? Big cities produce much more toxic emissions in the air, and its high-level consumption can bring more economical anxieties. As a result, some people argue that living in a big city can do harm to their health. However, my personal preference towards big cities holds me the opposite opinon to that argument. As I know, big cities are usually built with a specific index upon plant covering, which means, we are full of opportunities to see green plants in our surroundings by living in a big city. Also, there are many free parks open for the purpose of physical exercises. Most importantly, the convenient and speedy transportation tools allow us to travel to natural spots easily. Regarding the high-level consumption in big cities, I think it depends on individual's consuming habits. The big cities not only abundant in categories of goods, but also in pricing. In addition, many large-brand shops usually are not opened in small cities and rural areas, such as Walmart---a wholesale supermarket, and Zara----a fast-fashion clothing brand, as I know, they provide various categories with friendly price in certain period. In conclusion, the convenience of living in a big city can also bring benefit on both mental and physical health. Therefore, I disagree with the argument that residing in big cities is bad for people's health. 271 words
31 gen 2024 08:17
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Living in big cities, such as first-tier ones, was a common dream for many people in the past. However, as living standards have improved, paying increasing attention to health has gradually become a trend among human beings. More and more people are tending to relocate to small cities or in rural areas. Why? Big cities produce much more toxic emissions in the air, and their high-level of consumption can bring more economical anxieties. As a result, some people argue that living in a big city can harm their health. However, my personal preference towards big cities means I hold the opposite opinon to that argument. Firstly, big cities are usually planned with a specific percentage of green space, which means they are full of opportunities to see trees and flowers. Also, there are many free parks open for the purpose of physical exercise. Most importantly, convenient and speedy transportation allows us to easily travel to natural areas outside cities. Regarding the high-level of consumption in big cities, I think it depends on individual habits. Big cities are not only abundant in their range of goods, but also in their prices. In addition, many large-brand shops usually are not found in small cities and rural areas, such as Walmart---a wholesale supermarket, and Zara----a fast-fashion clothing brand. These types of shops provide various products with low prices (this paragraph doesn’t mention health at all) . In conclusion, the convenience of living in a big city can bring benefits for both mental and physical health. Therefore, I disagree with the argument that residing in big cities is bad for people's health. 271 words
You have some good ideas but this essay has some major problems. The introduction is way too long. It should be two sentences. The main part of the essay doesn’t really show how your arguments relate to health. This isn’t an essay about why it’s better to live in a city generally. You mention mental and physical health, which is good and provides a basis for a plan: Paragraph 1 - Introduction - two sentences Paragraph 2 — why cities are good for mental health (5-6 sentences) Paragraph 3 - why cities are good for physical health (5-6 sentences) Paragraph 4 - conclusion (1 - 2 sentences)
31 gennaio 2024
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