First of all, that violence on TV and the Internet increases the rate of crimes. For example, the murders and crimes that hurt people with weapons are influenced by these movies and videos.
Similarly, the bad effects on children are the most serious problem. These violence movies and videos are lead children to the bad behavior adalts, and are also passed on to their children. I think It's a bad cycle.
It's true that TV and the Internet are very convenient in that anyone can search and learn about anything at any time.
However, if you mistake how to use them, it will lead to bad results. Especially, for children, it's difficult to distinguish right from wrong information. Therefore, I believe that violence on TV and the Internet should be censored.
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I agree with that the number of young people who live with their parents after they finish their education will increase in the future and I have two reasons to support this opinion.
To begin with, Japan is facing a long recession, hence many people cannot afford to raise the cost of living as they used to, and if young people are independent of their parents and make a living on their own, they will have to take a part time job. Then they cannot spend time to their hobbies or study.
Secondly, living alone is dangerous. Nowadays, the rate of crimes is increasing, thus many parents often think young people should not live alone. It's true that living with parents is inferior to living alone in terms of personal freedom.
However, considering the cost of living and safety, the choice of that young people are independent of their parents could not say a good choice, therefore, I believe the number of young people who live with their parents after they finish their education will increase in the future.
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