First note

Hello,
This is my first note. I have just joined Italki. From my point of view, this website seems to be very useful. I am not sure that every note will receive a correction, but I hope so.
I am a safety manager in a factory in France, and I will be pleased to discuss about* safety issues with other safety managers from all other over the world. However, I really want to discuss many topics such as sports, books or TV shows. I play tennis, I enjoy boxing and horse riding, and I read a lot of different books. I also have a 9 months old baby.
I have just corrected my first note. I hope I did it well.
I am looking forward to reading your correction.

 

*to discuss about is not right in this sentence, but it is possible to find sentences with "to discuss about. It doesn't mean the same thing though.  "I would like to discuss about 20 different topics" is an example of this.  It means the same thing as "I would like to discuss approximately 20 different topics."

 I would suggest saying "I will be pleased to discuss safety issues..."

I would also suggest to keep practicing with puncuation. You are doing ok for most of it, but there are some commas that should be periods.  If the sentence can be read alone and it makes sense, then it probably should be a period.  If you want to join two full sentences together with a comma, then you need to use a conjunction (and, but, or, since, because, etc)

Anyway, welcome to italki.  I hope this helps

I find myself using books or courses as I study a language and the sections/chapters end up becoming goals for me. Right now my goal is based on the chapter on using future tense in hindi, so I am shooting for being able to read and write (and hopefully speak) future tense sentences as my short-term goal. Another goal for me is be being able to use all the pronouns from memory (I still mix them up quite a bit. These are goals that I should be able to accomplish after a few good study sessions. I think each person encounters areas of weakness in a language and those are good spots to make some short term goals in.

Hello Bunty,

 

I would imagine that prepostitions will seem backwards when you start learning them, because I have the same trouble with postpositions in Hindi. I usually have to read the phrase with the postposition right to left to make sense of it.  Prepositions and postpositions work very similarly.  They both show how things are related (The book ON the shelf).

 

Let me write some sentences with prepositions and see if I can help you understand them.

 

Today I went to the park with my sister and my two nieces.

The basic sentence is "I went." There are two phrases (prepositional phrases) that tell more about what I did.  

Where did I go?  to the park.  

"to" is a preposition. "to the park" is a prepositional phrase.

Whom did I go with? with my sister and my two nieces

"with" is a preposition. "with my sister and my two nieces" is a prepositional phrase.

 

Now I will make a sentence and try to add prepositional phrases to them.

I jumped.

Where did I jump from?

A rock.

Where did I jump to?

The water.

So here are two ways to combine these: "I jumped from the rock into the water," or "I jumped from the rock to the water."

 

There are many prepositions, but I'll list some of them here: from, to, with, above, near, about, for, until, before, since, etc

Try to make a few sentences yourself and I'll take a look at them.  Either send them to me in a message or add a comment onto this notebook entry.   

Your character is your legacy.

Every single person leaves a legacy when his/her earthly life is over. Your very existence has an impact on the world whether you intend it to or not. Your character tells who you are. It's what you'll be remembered for. So, what legacy do you want to leave behind ?

Character is your nature. It is who and what you are when no one is observing. In today's world that is we are overly preoccupied with image. The tendency is to worry too much about our reputation and too little about our character. A reputation is ever changing and can be destroyed in a brief moment, but character is built in a over a lifetime and is everlasting.

A good character is the best tombstone. It is by this  that the world will remember you when forget-me-nots are withered. Therefore, build up your character and live in a way to that will carve your name on hearts, and just not not just on marble!

 

Here are a few notes:

For the first correction, try to read the sentence like this:

"Your very existence has an impact on the world whether you intend your existence to or not.

I could expand this idea even further to show a clearer meaning.  

Your very existence has an impact on the world whether you intend your existence to have an impact or not. 

This is becoming repetitive though, so it's not a good idea to write this way.  Without adding the to you are saying that you intend your existence or you don't intend your existence, which is not what you meant.

The second correction (that is - we are) is needed because "that" refers back to "character", which would make the sentence say that character is overly preoccupied with image.

I changed the comma to a period to avoid a comma splice (two sentences that would need a conjuction or a full stop between them.)

If any other corrections seem confusing, then shoot me a message.

 

The simple answer is that whom is the object form of who and should be used as an object. I can't explain it better than this link: http://theoatmeal.com/comics/who_vs_whom. The basic idea in the link is that you can try making the sentence with he/him and see which one works. "He" is the subject form and "him" is the object form. If "he" works then use "who", but if "him works then use "whom". Example: Who/whom brought you those flowers? Try this sentence with he and him. He brought you those flowers? This sounds good. Him brought you those flowers? This sounds bad. He is the subject form, so we will use a subject form pronoun. The correct sentence is "Who brought you those flowers?" Here's another example: Who/whom did you send the letter to? Try the sentence with he and him again. He did you send the letter to? Him did you send the letter to? This one is tough, and it might help if we try to write the sentence differently. Did you send the letter to he? Did you send the letter to him? The correct choice is the object form "him", so the original sentence should use the object form "whom" Whom did you send the letter to? The link I put explains it much better than I can.

Original

June 18, I graduated from college. Wear caps means four years of my university life is over.Look back on these four years, had a happy excitement, also have pain, pay a sweat, tears, also have the harvest and achievement. Someone said, forgetting the past means betrayal, so, we recall the past, in the future.

 

Corrected

On June 18th, I graduated from college.  The cap I wore meant that my four years of unversity life are over.  Looking back on these four years, I remember the happiness, excitement, and the achievement, but also the pain, sweat, and tears.  Someone said, "Forgetting the past means betrayal, so we recall the past in the future."

 

I wasn't sure what you meant by harvest, so I left that out.  Some of the sentences you did not put in the subject, such as when you said "look back on these four years...".

The second sentence starts out with "wear caps means", which sounds like the present tense.  Since this happened in the past you should use past tense.  That sentence also did not have a subject, so I made "cap" the subject.

The many things you mention "happy excitement, pain, pay a sweat, tears, harvest, achievement", can be listed, but they need to be parallel.  That means that they should all be the same form.

I can't say, "I like apples, grapes, pears, and eating pineapples, but I CAN say " I like apples, grapes, pears, and pineapples.  "Eating pineapples, does not fit the pattern of the others.  That is why I changed "pay a sweat" to "sweat".  

I can give you some examples and list which words would work in each example. 1. I would say that I haven't been to the lake enough this summer. Speak, tell, and talk do not work here. 2. Make sure you speak clearly when you give a lecture. Talk works here, but say and tell don't. 3. If I tell mom about last night, I'll be grounded for a month. say, speak, and talk don't work here. 4. Listen, we need to talk. Speak works here, but say and tell do not.