Francesca🎀
I am reading Emily Ratajkowskyi’s story. The book tell of how she reached popularity with Robin Thicke’s musical video: Blurred lines. She had always been beautiful and her mum pushed her to run her own business as photo model and video model. Emily tells that she was used to work passively, with brands she thought were lame and she barely rehearse for video auditions and she hated to castings. Emily was often paralized by self-loathing and she thought “Recruiters think that I suck”. After Thicke’s video she was labelled as sex symbol for her beauty, breast and hips. Even though she is famous now, during Thicke’s video, she and her fellow models, were forced to sip alcool, therefore she didn’t like the experience.
14 mar 2023 13:34
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I am reading Emily Ratajkowskyi’s story. The book talks of/speaks of how she reached popularity with Robin Thicke’s musical video: "Blurred lines". She had always been beautiful and her mum pushed her to run her own business as a photo model and a video model. Emily says that she used to work passively, with brands she thought were lame ["lame" here sounds natural, and it makes sense, but it is a colloquialism, and if your English is not perfect, I caution you to make sure "lame" means what you think it means. Your usage does not look wrong here, but I cannot know what you intend to mean. If you are directly quoting that word from the book, then, of course, it is correct.] and she barely rehearsed for video auditions, and she hated castings. [Here, does "castings" refer to the event of people being casted? That is what I take it to mean] Emily was often paralyzed by self-loathing, and she thought, “Recruiters think (that) [here "that" can be and maybe should be removed] I suck”. After Thicke’s video, she was labeled a sex symbol for her beauty, breast, and hips. Even though she is famous now, during Thicke’s video, she and her fellow models were forced to sip alcohol, therefore ["therefore" is correct and it's fine, but "so" would be more natural and more idiomatic English transition in this sentence] she didn’t like the experience.
This shows a very good command of English. Good job!
14 marca 2023
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