Olya
Now the most important thing for me is calm and happy. And I really want to get it. I strive for this by all my action. So I would like to know if I will be such harmonious person or I will have some obstacles which can destroy me. If it is, what should I do?
19 июля 2024 г., 14:02
Исправления · 5
Hey Olya! Here is my corrected version: Corrected: The most important thing for me now is to be calm and happy. I really want to achieve this and strive for it with all my actions. I would like to know if I will become a harmonious person or if I will face obstacles that could hinder my peace. If there are obstacles, what should I do to overcome them? Here are the key changes: Clarity and Flow: "Now the most important thing for me is calm and happy." → "The most important thing for me now is to be calm and happy." This makes the sentence clearer and flows better. Grammar and Structure: "I strive for this by all my action." → "I strive for it with all my actions." Corrected the grammar to make it clearer. Expressing Future Concerns: "I would like to know if I will be such harmonious person or I will have some obstacles which can destroy me." → "I would like to know if I will become a harmonious person or if I will face obstacles that could hinder my peace." Improved wording to express your thoughts more clearly. Asking for Advice: "If it is, what should I do?" → "If there are obstacles, what should I do to overcome them?" Made the question more specific. These changes help your message sound natural and easy to understand.
19 июля 2024 г.
Now, the most important thing for me is to be calm and happy, and I really want to be so. I strive for this in all my actions. I would like to know if I will become such a harmonious person or will I have some obstacles which can destroy me. If this happens, what should I do?
20 июля 2024 г.
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