Hey Olya!
Here is my corrected version:
Corrected:
The most important thing for me now is to be calm and happy. I really want to achieve this and strive for it with all my actions. I would like to know if I will become a harmonious person or if I will face obstacles that could hinder my peace. If there are obstacles, what should I do to overcome them?
Here are the key changes:
Clarity and Flow:
"Now the most important thing for me is calm and happy." → "The most important thing for me now is to be calm and happy."
This makes the sentence clearer and flows better.
Grammar and Structure:
"I strive for this by all my action." → "I strive for it with all my actions."
Corrected the grammar to make it clearer.
Expressing Future Concerns:
"I would like to know if I will be such harmonious person or I will have some obstacles which can destroy me." → "I would like to know if I will become a harmonious person or if I will face obstacles that could hinder my peace."
Improved wording to express your thoughts more clearly.
Asking for Advice:
"If it is, what should I do?" → "If there are obstacles, what should I do to overcome them?"
Made the question more specific.
These changes help your message sound natural and easy to understand.