Yesterday, I came home at 6 a.m. and slept almost all day. I slept for about 20 hours in total. From the day before yesterday to yesterday, I had a barbecue and went to Enoshima. We played with firewo

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Yesterday, I came home at 6 a.m. and slept almost all day. I slept for about 20 hours in total. From the day before yesterday to yesterday, I had a barbecue and went to Enoshima. We played with fireworks on the beach and listened to the sound of the sea a lot. I think I was very tired because I had not moved around or gone to many places for a long time, so I slept for a very long time. My whole body hurts a lot, maybe because we did sumo wrestling. I also had some bruises on my arm. Yesterday, I had nothing to do, but I have work today. After school, I am going to get ready and go to work. A senior coworker who is three years older than me could not take his test today because he overslept. Because of that, he does not feel like coming to work today. He is a very funny person, so I want him to come. However, he is probably feeling very sad, so I think he will not come today. Even if he is not there, I will do my best. It is very hot today. I want to go home and rest soon.

22 июля 2026 г., 5:04

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Yesterday, I came home at 6 a.m. and slept almost all day. I slept for about 20 hours in total. From the day before yesterday to yesterday, I had a barbecue and went to Enoshima. We set off fireworks on the beach and listened to the sound of the sea for a long time. I think I was very tired because I hadn’t moved around much or visited many places for a long time, so I slept for such a long time. My whole body hurts a lot, maybe because we did sumo wrestling. I also have some bruises on my arm. Yesterday, I had nothing to do, but I have work today. After school, I’m going to get ready and go to work. A senior coworker who is three years older than me couldn’t take his test today because he overslept. Because of that, he doesn’t feel like coming to work today. He is a very funny person, so I want him to come. However, he is probably feeling very sad, so I think he won’t come today. Even if he isn’t there, I’ll do my best. It is very hot today. I want to go home and rest soon.

Level: C1. This is a very strong piece of writing. You tell a long story with many events, but the organisation remains clear and easy to follow. Your use of details, emotions, and personal reflections makes the writing feel very natural. Most corrections were related to collocations and making expressions sound more like a native speaker, not grammar problems. Excellent work! 😊

22 июля 2026 г., 14:31

Yesterday, I came home at 6 a.m. and slept almost all day. I slept for about 20 hours in total. From the day before yesterday to yesterday, I had a barbecue and went to Enoshima. We saw fireworks on the beach and listened to the sound of the sea . I think I was very tired because I had not been very active for a long time, so I slept for a very long time. My whole body hurts a lot, maybe because we did sumo wrestling. I also had some bruises on my arm. Yesterday, I had nothing to do, but I have work today. After school, I am going to get ready and go to work. A senior coworker who is three years older than me could not take his test today because he overslept. Because of that, he does not feel like coming to work today. However, he is a very funny person, so I hope he's at work today. However, he is probably feeling very disappointed, so I bet he will not come today. Even if he is not there, I will do my best. It is very hot today. I want to go home and rest soon. This was really good! There are just a few small improvements to consider. Your description was very detailed and I could easily imagine that it was a tiring time for you. Keep up the great work!

22 июля 2026 г., 7:59

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