Sayuri
One of my favorite movies is" The Karate Kid." Until my favorite character passes away, let me introduce a storyline. The main character is Daniel. He was targeted in his school. One day he was hit by some people. It was unfair. He fell under the ground, and the boy hit his stomach repeatedly even though he couldn't stand up. Mr. Miyagi accidentally noticed it. He decides to help him. He was good at Karate. After a few days, Daniel tried to learn Karate from Mr. Miyagi but hesitated to teach Karate. But he gradually taught karate. This movie ended up with karate kid Ⅲ, and It continues with Koburakai. It became a TV drama on Netflix. I didn't remember when Mr . Miyagi died. I was sad. Daniel only learned the defense from him. How will he fight against people who use dirty play? Anyway, It was a pretty exciting story.
27 июня 2022 г., 11:59
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One of my favorite movies is" The Karate Kid." Before I talk about my favorite character passing away, let me introduce the storyline. The main character's name is Daniel. He was bullied at school. One day he was hit by another student, which was unfair because he didn't provoke him. He fell on the ground, and the boy started to hit/punch his stomach repeatedly even though Daniel couldn't stand up. Mr. Miyagi accidentally noticed it and decided to help him since he was good at Karate. After a few days, Daniel tried to learn Karate from Mr. Miyagi but was hesitant to take Karate classes. But Mr. Miyagi decided to gradually teach him karate. Karate kid Ⅲ was the last entry of this movie trilogy, and there is currently a Netflix sequel called Cobra Kai. I don't remember when Mr. Miyagi died but it's sad because Daniel learned self-defense only from him. How will he fight against people who play dirty? Anyway, It was a pretty exciting story.
Good work, I tried to simplify some of your sentences, and used relative clauses to make longer ones.
27 июня 2022 г.
One of my favorite movies is "The Karate Kid." At least, until my favorite character passes away. Let me introduce the storyline. The main character is called Daniel. He was bullied in school. One day he was jumped by some people. That was unfair. He fell to the ground and a boy hit his stomach repeatedly even though he couldn't stand up. Mr. Miyagi accidentally noticed it and he decided to help him. Mr. Miyagi was good at Karate. After a few days, Daniel tried to learn Karate from Mr. Miyagi, but Mr. Miyagi hesitated to teach Karate. He gradually taught karate to Daniel, though. The movie series concludes with karate kid Ⅲ, and it continues with Koburakai. It also became (was adapted as) a TV drama on Netflix. I don't remember when Mr . Miyagi died exactly. I was sad, though. Daniel only learned defensive techniques from him. How will he be able to fight against people who use play dirty? Anyway, it was a pretty exciting story.
Nice work, keep it up!
27 июня 2022 г.
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Sayuri
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китайский (путунхуа), английский, японский, испанский
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китайский (путунхуа), английский, испанский