shiojam
Last weekend, I celebrated my boyfriend’s birthday. I've been planning it since a month ago. I chose the hotel which can see the Tokyo tower from the room.I bought 2 pieces of tarts because we don’t like fresh cream cakes and much sweets. Then I came early to the hotel to prepare for surprise. First, I inflated the balloon. I didn’t have any pump, so it was little bit harder. After that I decorated it. I went to the meeting, joined my boyfriend, and headed to the hotel. He was very happy. I was glad and relieved to see his smile. At the night, we went to izakaya which I reserved. I reserved two izakaya. First one is delicious the craft beer. He likes beer so I chose it. The izakaya is not only craft beer but also food were delicious. We enjoyed the izakaya. Second is delicious beef tongue. Gyutan Aburi was so delicious. I wanted eat more at second izakaya, but it was second izakaya so I was full. We couldn’t eat more. We went back to the hotel, I had to take a shower, but I couldn’t. Because I had headaches cause beer. I like beer but drink too much beer is not acceptable to my body. I decided to drink beer only for first drink.
18 дек. 2023 г., 0:41
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Last weekend, I celebrated my boyfriend’s birthday. I've been planning it since a month ago. I chose the hotel with the view of Tokyo tower from the room. I bought 2 pieces of tarts because we don’t like fresh cream cakes and sweets. Then I went to the hotel early to prepare for a surprise. First, I inflated the balloons. I didn’t have any pump, so it was little bit harder than I expected. After that I decorated it. I went to the meeting place, joined my boyfriend, and headed to the hotel. He was very happy. I was glad and relieved to see his smile. At night, we went to the izakaya which I reserved. I reserved two izakayas. First one was a delicious izakaya with craft beers. He likes beer so I chose it. The izakaya was not only craft beer but also the food was delicious. We enjoyed the izakaya. Second was a delicious beef tongue izakaya. Gyutan Aburi was so delicious. I wanted to eat more at second izakaya, but due it being the second izakaya I was full. We couldn’t eat more. We went back to the hotel, and I couldn't take a shower even though I had too. This was because I had headaches caused by beer. I like beer but drinking too much beer is not acceptable to my body. From this, I decided to drink beer only for the first drink.
Hello, I am Nami the assistant of this class. It looks like you had a wonderful, but a little bit bad day. It is my dream to celebrate birthday at the hotel for my boyfriend. (First, I would have to make one...) Nice writing! I made some corrections. First, there were some words missing or unneeded. Also, check how you connect and start each sentence. There were some sentences that could be connected. Furthermore, try to not start the sentence with conjunctions. If you double check these two things your writing will become more better!
23 декабря 2023 г.
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