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Essay: The importance of learning to play music.
Everyday we are bombarded of music everywhere: shopping centres, parties and even mobile phones. Music is force, energy. Nowadays every population has her own musical tradition.
Actually, a lot of people learn or can play a musical instrument for various reasons. At first, because of the power of music that is able to give energy and positivity; music is considered the relief valve of more people who enjoy this power and let them to improve and show the own creativity trough the ability of playing a musical instrument.
On the other hand, not everybody can play music, but can learn it. In fact, there are special courses in which people of all ages can learn and improve their technical abilities in playing one ore more musical instruments. The skills required are: passion, tenacity and patience.
For this purpose, courses are also organised for children, that improve their creativity, develop self-discipline and increase organisational skills.
In conclusion, a science research showed how read or play music develops higher thinking skills; in fact, the part of the brain used to read music is the same used in mathematical and logical thinking.
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Essay: The importance of learning to play music
Everyday we are bombarded of with music everywhere: shopping centres, parties and even mobile phones. Music is a force, energy. Nowadays, every population has her its own musical tradition.
Actually, a lot of people learn, or can play, a musical instrument for various reasons. At first, because of the power of music that is able to give energy and positivity, music is considered the relief valve of more people who enjoy this power and lets them to improve and show their own creativity through the ability of to playing a musical instrument.
On the other hand, not everybody can play music, but can learn it. In fact, there are special courses in which people of all ages can learn and improve their technical abilities in playing one ore more musical instruments. The skills required are: passion, tenacity and patience.
For this purpose, courses are also organised for children, that improve their creativity, develop self-discipline and increase organisational skills.
In conclusion, a scientific research has shown how reading or playing music develops higher thinking skills; in fact, the part of the brain used to read music is the same used in mathematical and logical thinking.
Ciao Rosa, not bad. Keep practicing! Simón.
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Thank you! Is it correct?
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Great essay
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