My favorite cafe

I have <s>my</s> a favorite cafe <s>and</s> where I <s>always </s>go <s>there in the</s> every morning. <s>Because I</s>f you go there before 11am and order one cup of coffee, you can get a piece of bread for free! The bread is really soft and crispy on the outside and so delicious. <s>And also</s> You can also choose three flavors to go with the bread, anko paste, egg paste and strawberry jam. I really like Anko paste <s>at this cafe</s> so always choose it. After 8am it becomes crowded and you have to wait to go inside <s>to</s>. So I get up early <s>in spite ,</s>even on <s>of</s> my day off, when I want to go there! People spend their time peacefully there, <s>time</s> like talking with friends or family, reading books, or/and learning <s>there</s>. I like <s>this</s> the <s>morning</s> time I spend there.

My favorite cafe

I have my favorite cafe and I always go there in the morning. Because if you go there before 11 a.m. and order one cup of coffee, you can get a bread roll for free! The roll is really soft and crispy <em style="color: rgb(102, 163, 224);">(optionally, you might consider "on the" here, but you don't really need it)</em> outside and so delicious. And also you can choose three flavors with the bread; Anko paste, egg paste and strawberry jam. I really like Anko paste at this cafe so always choose it. After 8 a.m. it becomes <em style="color: rgb(102, 163, 224);">(informally, you would use "gets")</em> crowded and you have to wait to get in. So I get up early even on my day off when I want to go there! People spend peaceful time there, like talking with friends or family, reading books, or studying. I like this morning time I spend there.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bread_roll

<em style="color: rgb(102, 163, 224);">It sounds like a good café ;)</em>

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