Sorry I didnt finish the corrections in the last entry! ^^;

In the early 20th century, the mortality rate was actually once quite high because the facilities of medical equipment are were not perfect enough for people to cure their illnesses. But With the development of the technology, more and more machines were used for treatment  treating patients. Illness became not so apalling as it once was.

People going out has become more convenient too due to the advancement of technology. We can go to a place by buses, trains, cars or airplanes. Maybe, For example, we are once in Beijing in the morning but by taking a plane trip we are in London in the evening. The Technology has shortened the distance from one place to another place.

Some people said argue that the progress of technology has also caused many problems. In fact, some negative effects especially for environment are certainly caused by the progress of technology. The polluted air, the polluted water and so on are all bad for people's health. More and more cars are driven on the street causing serious congestion problems on the roads and highways.
In my opinion, the progress of technology has advantages and disadvantages, but I think the positive side overweight outweighs the negative side. So We should continue to develop the education and the technology; then we would have a better future.

(Well Written Christie Dylan! This is really good. You have strong points, well-thought out comments and you backed up your statements with proofs. Excellent work! I tried to correct this the best I can! Work hard and good luck! If you have any further questions or need any help, feel free to contact me! -Mayuri)

The progress of technology

The progress of technology is the biggest achievement in the 20th century. With the development of the technology, the way of people's life has been changed Peoples lives have been drastically change; the living standards have been improved. In addition, many problems were also caused by the progress of technology.

In the early 20 century,the mortality rate is actually high.Because the facilities of medical equipment are not perfect for people to cure their illness. But with the development of the technology, more and more machines were used for treatment patients. The illness become not such appalling.
people go out becoming more convenient too. We can go to a place by bus.,train or airplane. Maybe we are in Beijing in the morning but we are in London in the evening. The technology shorten the distance from one place to another place.
Some people said the progress of technology also caused many problems. In fact, some negative effects especially for environment certainly caused by progress of technology. The polluted air,the polluted water and so on are all bad for people's health. More and more cars are driven on the street causing serious congestion problems.
In my opinion, the progress of technology has advantages and disadvantages.But i think the positive side overweight the negative side.So we should develop the education and the technology.Then we would have a better future.