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IELTS WRITING TASK 2 "In recent years there has been a decline in the number of different species of animal and plant. What are the causes and effects of this problem? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?" Recent years has seen a decrease in the quantity of different species of animal and plant all over the world. This mainly originates from directly devastating activities of human beings, which lead to dire consequences. This essay will suggest the causes and effect as well as solutions to this problem. Deliberately destructive actions of man may be considered as the first to destroy the natural balance in the world. In one instance, large amount of forest is cut down everday, resulting in numerous subsequent matters. Numerous natural catastrophes like flood or landslide follow; the world lacks oxygen supply and the living environment of animal and plant is harmed. Another notable example is that, the uncontrollable hunting of people are putting rare animals at risk thus degrading the biodiversity of our earth. Therefore, we must prevent this concern for our interest. First of all, the government should uphold strict penalties to anyone who decimate animals and plants. To this end, the government should introduce law levied against those selling and buying rare species illegally, for example. Besides it is also necessary to raise human's knowledge about how the ecology means to them. This can be achieved by educating children from early age or using the media to make this knowledge common to everyone.Such measures could act as tremendous steps towards solving this problem. In a nutshell, species of animal and plant has declined recently due to human beings. This can be countered by bringing in strict law environmentally related and people's knowledge. It is hoped that these strategies are increasingly put into practice in the foreseeable future.
26 апр. 2014 г., 17:14
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IELTS WRITING TASK 2

"In recent years there has been a decline in the number of different species of animal and plant.
What are the causes and effects of this problem?
What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?"



In recent years has we have seen a decrease in the quantity number of different species of animals and plants all over the world. This is mainly originates from due from the directly devastationg activities of caused by human beings. which lead to dire The consequences are dire. This essay will suggest looks at the causes and effect and what as well as solutions can be offered to this problem.

Deliberately destructive actions of man may be considered as are the first to main cause in which destroy the natural balance of nature is destroyed in the world. In one for an instance, large amount swaths of the forest is being cut down everday, resulting in numerous subsequent matters. Numerous natural catastrophes like floods or and landslidewhenever the rains come follow; the world lacks oxygen supply quality of air and the living environment of animal and plant is eco-systems are invariably harmed. Another notable example is that, The uncontrolled hunting of people are putting rare animals at risk thus degrades the bio-diversity of our planet earth.

Therefore, we must prevent All these happenings are a this concern for all of us and a responsibility of each of us to ensure these senseless destruction must be stopped. our interest. First of all, The government should take the lead and set up strict laws with hefty to deter from such activities from happening. uphold strict penalties to anyone who decimate animals and plants. To this end, the government should introduce law levied against Those selling and buying Illegal trading of rare species must be stopped through education and heavy handed laws. illegally, for example. Besides it is also necessary to raise human's knowledge about how the ecology means to them. Education will be slow but most effective. This can be achieved by educating children from early age or using the media to make this knowledge common to everyone.Such measures could act as tremendous steps towards solving this problem. You are saying the same thing again but in a different way.  If you remove this, the quality of your essay is not changed.  You are only trying to get around the essay word limit.  Write something that will give more value such as, exposing the myths about eating exotic animals etc.

In a nutshell, species of animal and plant has declined recently due to human beings. This can be countered by bringing in strict law environmentally related and people's knowledge. It is hoped that these strategies are increasingly put into practice in the foreseeable future.Again you are telling me nothing new. It shows me that you did not have enough thoughts on the essay. Since this is, itelts your essay will be scrutinized on how well you write on the topic etc.  Here's my concluding paragraph to give you an idea.

our time is running out.  We cannot sit by and idly watch the world being destroyed through the greedy acts of a few.  Remember, when Mother Earth goes, we will be going as well.  We don't have another planet to call home!

28 апреля 2014 г.
谢林峰 tiếng Việt của bạn rất tốt
1 мая 2014 г.
"Trong những năm gần đây đã có một sự suy giảm số lượng các loài khác nhau của động vật và thực vật. Nguyên nhân và ảnh hưởng của vấn đề này là gì? Những biện pháp có thể được thực hiện để giảm vấn đề này? " Những năm gần đây đã thấy sự sụt giảm về số lượng của các loài khác nhau của động vật và thực vật trên toàn thế giới . Điều này chủ yếu bắt nguồn từ các hoạt động trực tiếp tàn phá của con người , dẫn đến hậu quả thảm khốc .
1 мая 2014 г.
272 words, i mistook
27 апреля 2014 г.
In my view, 250 words is the ideal task requirement.
27 апреля 2014 г.
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