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I Want To Buy A Pet Rabbit I want to buy a pet rabbit because rabbits are cute. I want to sleep with her and feed her lettuce. Rabbits eat only vegetable, and I have heard it makes their organs clean. I do not want her to bother me when I study because I love studying as much as I love her. I want a white rabbit instead of a gray one. I do not dislike gray rabbits, but their color make me feel a little bit gloomy. When my dad reads a fairy tale to me at night next to my bed, I want my rabbit to be right next to me on my bed. We will be best friends.
28 февр. 2015 г., 13:24
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I Want To Buy A Pet Rabbit

I want to buy a pet rabbit because rabbits are cute. I want to sleep with her and feed her lettuce. Rabbits only eat vegetables, and I have heard it makes their organs clean. I do not want her to bother me when I study because I love studying as much as I love her. I want a white rabbit instead of a gray one. I do not dislike gray rabbits, but their color makes me feel a little bit gloomy. When my dad reads a fairy tale to me at night next to my bed, I want my rabbit to be right next to me on my bed. We will be best friends.

10 января 2016 г.
I honestly agree. x-) I'm not 100% sure if we're right, but I have read about the order of "only" in my grammar book. People would just put "only" before the verb because it sounds natural.
10 января 2016 г.
the adverb word order "eat only" is correct.
10 января 2016 г.

I Want To Buy A Pet Rabbit

I want to buy a pet rabbit because rabbits are cute. I want to sleep with her and feed her lettuce. Rabbits only eat* vegetables, and I have heard it makes their organs clean. I do not want her to bother me when I study because I love studying as much as I love her. I want a white rabbit instead of a gray one. I do not dislike gray rabbits, but their color make me feel a little bit gloomy. When my dad reads a fairy tale to me at night next to my bed, I want my rabbit to be right next to me on my bed. We will be best friends.

 

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*this is a very common problem for korean speakers. they always put "(verb) only". you should switch the two words to make it "only (verb)". that way it sounds much more natural and native.

 

Your english is very good. besides that one correction, everything else was great!

 

p.s. good choice, rabbits are super cute ^^

28 февраля 2015 г.
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