please, somebody can check my essay. and how to be more formal? please, somebody can check my essay. and how to be more formal? I want to use more linking work, phrasal verbs and passive voice, can you help me? the used of animal to benefit or entertainment of people should be illegal in the world, however if the animal does not suffer, this won't be a issue. I agree with this statement due to the next. during many years people and animales have been together, in many cases an animal is the best friend of the man, nevertheless other people have been using the animals to having some type of benefits, for example through world many circus have traveling to different cities or countries realizing shows with animals, almost alls circuses use the wild animals like main event and this is a big problem because the people enjoy to see them, but they don't know that the animals is suffereing because these animals are in cell and they aren't in their natural habitad. Also, the circuses have to pay expensive amount by the exotic animals, this is a important factor because people want to earn this grat amount of money and they is moving to the animal's home to catch them and next can sell them. On the other hands there are competitions that have like goal search and kill animals, for many people this is a interesting sport such as the duck competitions which the winner is who killed more ducks. finally we can find people that liked have things made with animals, the rhino's killer is clearly an example, these kind of people enjoy kill the rhinos and cut parts of their body, other people have tools made with animal's skin or tooth. to conclude, all these activities should be illegal in the world, however there are many countries have laws about this issue, they is getting over the problem thanks the governments, on the other hands, nowadays people don't enjoy the animal's shows, actually the circuses have changed these shows like form of recreation, also people have take awareness and prefer don't buy things made with animals, finally there are many organizations against of used of animals to people's benefit, with the helped of the government y the laws about killed and transportation of animal out their habitad.