Admissions Essay part2 ~ pleas help me with corrections :) Fashion is a instant language ; fashion is a lifestyle ; fashion is how you present yourself today. With my sunglasses on, I’m Jack Nicholson. Without them, I’m fat and 60. - Jack Nicholson For me, without my clothing, I am just a unconfident and ordinary asian girl. I truly believed that different clothing can present different personality. So, I want to become a theatre costume designer and work in a team. I know it is not easy, but there is no easy way to makes dream come true. I will keep trying and never give up.

Admissions Essay part1 ~ pleas help me with corrections :) Being a fashion designer is a very enviable career, which can creating fabulous dresses and watching people wearing the clothing they designed. I would like to do things like that in my future, but I would rather call that an artist. I grew up in a home where full of love. since I was 3, my mom let me learn lots of thing, such as percussion, piano, violin, panting, even writing. She wants me to find out what I want by myself. I am the type of person who pays attention to dressing and image. I dress up every time I go out, even when I put the garbage out. High school students in Taiwan must wear uniforms but our school has a provision that if our class is very orderly, we are permitted to wear civilian clothes to school one day a week. It is a great day when I can wear my ordinary clothes. I try to match my clothes with the intention of receiving praise from my classmates. On the way to school is just like walking on the catwalk. I want the attract the attention of others, even if I dress oddly. Sometimes, my own clothes just can’t meet me, and there are so many great ideas full of my head, then I will put them on canvas. Since then, the seed named dream quietly bud. No one ever told me about fashion and how these fabulous dresses came from. Maybe it’s because of my ignorance or the conservative education in Taiwan, I used to thought, when I grow up, my job will be either sit in front of a desk doing paper work or being a teacher. Until the first time I watch <gossip girl>, I finally found what I want in my future. “ yeah, that’s it ! That’s exactly what I want to do !! “ I yelled, when Jenny Humphrey was making clothes for her own fashion show. I started taking classes of pattern making and sewing, The more I have learn, the more I understand that I need to go outside my world, see how is fashion going on with other culture. January,2013. I immigrated to the United States. I have visited a lot of school already. When I came to (school name), I know this is it. (school name) is a place where have well study environment and adequate study materials ; where people would struggle to increase knowledge and feel free to create. there is more..................

Write about school -my translation (Chinese->English) i think it's not coherent 從小我就是一個很注重穿著打扮與形象的人，只要岀門都一定會打扮，即使只是去倒垃圾。 在台灣的國中生都要穿著制服，而我們學校有一項規定，只要秩序良好的班級，一星期就可以穿一天便服上學，對我來說，能穿便服是個大日子，我會用心搭配衣櫃裡現有的衣服，只為了得到同濟的讚許，上學的途中就像model走秀一樣，希望吸引他人的目光，甚至不惜打扮得古怪新潮。 I'm a person who pay attention on dressing and image.I will dress up every time I went out, even when i throw the garbage out. high school students in Taiwan have to wear uniforms, and our school has a provision, if our class are very orderly,we can wear civilian clothes to school one day a week, and it's a big day to wear civilian clothes for me. I will match the existing clothes intentions, just for the praise from classmates ,the way on school just like walking on the catwalk.I want to attract the attention of others, even dress odd.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself HI , my name is Alice. I'm from Taiwan. I learn English because I'm going to study in the US. I love watching hollywood movies so that I can enhance my listening. I'm not good at writing. but I will study hard :) speechless...