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Some people think that music as a school subject is an essential part of personal growth, while others consider teaching music at school wasteful. I would like to discuss both views and give my opinion. Music helps cultivates not only musical techniques but also sense of beauty, creative expression and cooperation with others. All of those aspects definitely nurture young minds and add precious experience to schooldays. Music classes in Japan often make students practise for choir at graduation or other events, which creates sense of belonging and makes ever-lasting memories. In addition, music serves in raising cultural awareness. Traditional music encourages students to learn about their contry's culture and history. World music showcases diversity. On the other hand, critics think teachers should focus on more important subjects, such as science and languages. It is true that music has subjective qualities which make it hard to achieve objective goals or evaluate students' performance appropriately. Additionally, music is usually not required on high school or university entrance exams except for musical courses. In fact, many private high schools in Japan only teach music in the first year. Some claim that such practices widen the gaps of academic performance between public and private schools, lessening the popularity of the former. To summarise, music plays an important roles in a youth life, but it has several aspects which do not fit in today's education system. I think school needs to balance music and other subjects in the curriculum.
2024年6月26日 11:19
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Some people think that music as a school subject is an essential part of personal growth, while others consider teaching music at school wasteful. I would like to discuss both views and give my opinion. (Give your opinion here. Your sentence just copies what is in the question) Music lessons help cultivate not only musical techniques but also a sense of beauty, creative expression and cooperation with others. All of those aspects definitely nurture young minds and add precious experience to schooldays. For example, music classes in Japan often make students do choir practise for graduation or other events, which creates a sense of belonging and makes ever-lasting memories. In addition, music serves in raising cultural awareness. Traditional music encourages students to learn about their country’s culture and history. World music showcases diversity. On the other hand, critics think teachers should focus on more important subjects, such as science and languages. It is true that music has subjective qualities which make it hard to achieve objective goals or evaluate students' performance appropriately. Additionally, music is usually not required on high school or university entrance exams except for music courses. In fact, many private high schools in Japan only teach music in the first year. Some claim that such practices widen the gap in academic performance between public and private schools, lessening the popularity of the former. To summarise, music plays an important roles in a youth’s life, but it has several aspects which do not fit in today's education system. I think schools need to balance music and other subjects in the curriculum.
Well done, very good. Just a few small corrections.
2024年6月26日
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