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my vacantion My want to Dalian take my vacation on May this year.My husband,my daughters and I togother went to there. Th frist day,my husband runned over marathon.My daughters and I saw the sea for the frist time.We were very excited.My daughters loved play with sand on the beach.We went to the aquarium.In the aquarium,we saw some marine animals,and watched the marine animals show.My litter daughter was afraid when she saw the shark,but she braved to accompany us.The second day,we went to Kingdom of Discovery.My husband played a lot of exciting game,I dared not to play.My daughters played children,s amusement equipment.We ate a lot of delicious see food.We were enjoy this vacantion..
2019年6月17日 05:10
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谢谢
2019年6月21日
可以,很乐意。
2019年6月21日
My <s>vacantion</s> Vacation

<s>My want</s> I went to Dalian <s>take my</s> on vacation <s>on</s> in May this year. My husband, my daughters and I <s>togother</s> went <s>to</s> there as a family. (<em>you are following Chinese style</em> 一起去) The <s>frist</s> first day, my husband <s>runned over</s> ran a marathon. My daughters and I saw the sea for the <s>frist</s> first time. We were very excited. My daughters loved to play with sand on the beach. We went to the aquarium. In the aquarium, we saw some marine animals, and watched the marine animals show. My <s>litter</s> youngest daughter was afraid when she saw the shark at first, but she <s>braved</s> found the courage to accompany us. The second day, we went to The Kingdom of Discovery. My husband <s>played</s> went on a lot of exciting <s>game</s> rides, but I dared not to <s>play</s> go on those rides . My daughters <s>played</s> went on the children's amusement <s>equipment</s> rides. We ate a lot of delicious see (<em>you mean seafood</em> (海鲜) ?) food. We <s>were</s> really enjoyed this <s>vacantion</s> vacation.

<em>-I looked up Dalian Kingdom of Discovery and found out that it is an amusement park. For amusement parks, we usually don't say "play games". You can say, "sat on the rides", "went on the rides" or "took the rides."</em>
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<em>-Don't forget to leave a space after all punctuation ( . , ? etc)</em>
2019年6月21日
有人可以帮我修改一下吗?谢谢
2019年6月20日
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