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Should teenagers work part-time? Many teenagers have a part-time job. This can be due to many different reasons. Some parents do not give their children any pocket money. If they want some, they have to work. Others do not have to work part-time to get some money. However, they have this opportunity too. This brings up the question:" Should they work too?". Also, part-time job can bring some negatives. Fine example of negative influence on teenagers is shortage of free time. Teenagers then does not have enought time to go to the cinema or to meet with his friends. The most, if not all, teenagers still have to go to school. Part-time job can also cause the shortage of time for studies. This has very bad influence on teenager's performance in school. Sure, we should also look at the advantages that part-time jobs offer to them. Thanks to this job, teenagers will learn to value their money and hopefully, even to spend it more wisely. I am sure everybody will agree with me when I say that nothing is free in the world we live in. Of course, there are some exceptions, but I am pretty sure that nobody can make a living of finding coins on the ground. To conclude, the part-time job can make teenager's life much harder. On the other hand, what does not kill you makes you stronger. In my opinion, teenagers should work part-time, if they have a chance.

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Alexandra, the structure of this essay is fantastic. You use the transition words such as also/sure/of course/to conclude perfectly. I was recently doing some research [note the phrasal verb, to do research :) ] on the TOEFL exam and this is exactly the kind of thing they are looking for on the essay section. Not sure if that's what you were aiming for, but regardless, great work!

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