Essay 3 (Please help me to revise it, many thanks!!!!)

The TAS hires around 500 staff in total in different departments; therefore, they need managers and middle-managers to assist the top leader. The transformational leadership operates efficiently in the collegial model, due to the fact that/because the leader and manager levels have common beliefs and targets. However, it may overlook the different sub-groups developing various sub-cultures in this large organisation. While the leader addresses the beliefs and values of the OC, however, staff may have different perspectives and goals towards the TAS. The managers and middle-managers have opportunities to communicate with the leader, but other employees cannot express their concepts ideas? to the top directly. Furthermore, decision-making in different groups also takes a long time with this approach.  The OC potential changes from the top leader to basic staff. Therefore, the TAS should follow a culture model which puts the beliefs and ideology in the centre of the organisation and not only emphasising focus?on management levels. Bush argues that everyone has personal an ideology and belief which impacts their behaviour and other people’s behaviour indirectly. These ideologies and values should be shared by communication within the organisation. Therefore, the culture model may cultivate the OC and increase the interpersonal relationships.

Essay 3 (Please help me to revise it, many thanks!!!!)

The TAS hires around 500 staff in total in different departments, therefore they need managers and middle-managers to assist the top leader. The transformational leadership operates efficiently in the collegial model, due to the leader and managers’ levels of common beliefs and targets. However, it may overlook the different sub-groups developing various sub-cultures in this large organization. When the leader addresses the beliefs and values of the OC, however staff may have different perspectives and goals towards the TAS. The managers and middle-managers have opportunities to communicate with the leader, but other employees cannot express their concepts to the top directly. Furthermore, this approach also takes a long time to decision-making in different groups. The OC potential changes from top leader to basic staff. Therefore, the TAS should follow culture model which puts the beliefs and ideology in the central of the organization, not only emphasizing on managers’ levels. Bush argues that everyone has personal ideology and belief which impacts their behaviour and other people’s behaviour indirectly. These ideology and values should be shared by communications within the organization. Therefore, culture model may cultivate the OC and increase the interpersonal relationships.

Only two spelling mistakes, other than that you did good!

The underlined text are just to let you see where I deleted the commas