online shopping It's phenomenon that online shopping is more and more popular for the deplement of the internet technology.Without doubt,our life is changed by online shopping. First of all,online sh

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online shopping It's phenomenon that online shopping is more and more popular for the deplement of the internet technology.Without doubt,our life is changed by online shopping. First of all,online shopping's advantage is obvious.people shopping on the internet can save a lot time and energy.Because people needn’t go shopping in the real life. They just need using computer in the home and move fingers .That is more convenient and fast to online shopping. However,we can’t be ignored that online shopping has shortcoming .For example, you bought something is not looks like photo in the net and the size maybe is not suitable yourself. What’s worse , you maybe bought the fake. In conclusion, we should be careful to shopping on the internet. On the other hands, the businessman should improve their credit. please help. thanks so mush

2013年5月21日 13:01

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Online Shopping

The phenomenon of online shopping is becoming more and more popular due to the development of_internet technology._Without a doubt,_our lives are being changed by online shopping.
First of all,_the advantages to online shopping are obvious: people shopping on the internet can save a lot time and energy because they don't need to go shopping in_real life. They just need to use a computer at home and to move their fingers._That way online shopping is more convenient and faster.
However,we can’t_ignore that online shopping has its shortcomings._For example, you may buy something which does not look like in the photo on the net, or the size may not be suitable. What’s worse, you may buy a fake product.
In conclusion, we should be careful about shopping on the internet. On the other hand, online companies should improve their paying options. Some of these are just suggestions. Regards! :D

please help. thanks so mush

2013年5月21日

There were some problems with the structure of your sentances, so I decide to rewrite them instead of just correct them. The ones I wrote are in blue. The other thing I would suggest is pay more attention to your content and orginization when writing.

Shopping Online

It's phenomenon that online shopping is more and more popular for the deplement of the internet technology.With the development of internet technology, online shopping is becoming more and more popular. Without doubt,our life is changed by online shopping. With out a doubt our lives have all been impacted by online shopping.
First of all,online shopping's advantage is obvious. people shopping on the internet can save a lot time and energy.Because people needn’t go shopping in the real life. They just need using computer in the home and move fingers .That is more convenient and fast to online shopping. The advantages to shopping online are obvious. You can save a lot of time and energy because you don't have to physically go to the store, you just move your fingers at the computer.

However,we can’t be ignored that online shopping has shortcoming .You can't, however, ignore the shortcomings of online shopping. For example, you bought something is not looks like photo in the net and the size maybe is not suitable yourself. You might buy something online only to find out it looks nothing like the photo you saw of it, or it isn't actually the right size for you. What’s worse , you maybe bought the fake. Even worse, it may be a counterfeit product.
In conclusion, we should be careful to shopping on the internet. We should be careful shopping online. On the other hands, the businessman should improve their credit. On the other hand, perhaps the online sellers should improve their credibility.

please help. thanks so mush Please help. Thank you so much.

Good job. 加油！

2013年5月31日

I would say it all depends on the society your're focusing on, since not at all societies are structured for that. In Latin America there are still some cities who dont have access to internet or dont have the infrastructured needed. At the same time, they way people see online shopping is not the same. We still have to go the extra mile to convince more and more people, that buying online is not an scam. And until we dont do that, people would prefer the old break-n-mortar stores to buy anything, even if it takes more time. As if it acoount for China, I would say that there are some reasons why it is to popular there. Shipping for small products is very cheap. There are some sites like Weibo which doesnt need of expert sellers to do their bussines, it is designed for anyone who is willing to do it :) I hope it becomes a real tendency in Latin America, so we can have a better products exchange within each country that intagrate it.

2013年7月19日