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Help me to correct this please. This is my resume, please help me. I have started to work for two years since I graduated from university in June 2012. I was a trainee in a insurance company for 5 months(2011/7-2011/12). So, my job was telemarketing. Then I called the strangers everyday to sell my insurance.I learned something from it. Firstly, I must keep patient when I talked to all kinds of people. Secondly, I needed to practice my presentation skills. Thirdly, it let me know what important courage it is! I stayed at home to help my parents’food store for a whole year in 2012. I sold food and cleaned all things after customers finishing the food. Actually, I was a waitress. I felt farctate and was thankful to my parents. I worked in company about communication during 2013. My job was sorting out data. I get more carefully since I employed myself in it.

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Help me to correct this please.

This is my resume, please help me.

I have been working for two years since I graduated from the university in June 2012.
I was a trainee in a insurance company for 5 months (2011/7-2011/12). So, My job there was telemarketing. My duties included calling the strangers everyday to sell my insurance. I learned something from that experience. Firstly, I must remain patient when talking to all kinds of people. Secondly, I needed to practice my presentation skills. Thirdly, it let me know how important courage it is!
I stayed at home to help my parents’ food store for a whole year in 2012. I sold food and cleaned everything after customers finished with the food. Actually, I was a waitress. I felt that I made a valuable contribution and was thankful to my parents.
I worked in company involved with communication during 2013. My job was sorting out data. I have become more careful and observant as a result of this work.

 

[Good work.  Some of my corrections were to make the sentences sound more natural in a resume.]

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Hi cancy! I won't correct your text 'cuse I'm not a native english speaker, but I can say that you did a great work! There are minor flaws, such as "a" instead of "an" and some verb conjugations. But overall you're doing a great job! We surely can undertand what you wrote and what you meant. Keep up this good work and you are gonna be able to write way better in the near future!

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