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Shiraz and Shirazian people I would like to describe my city and people who are living in Shiraz. My city has many different places for tourist. the most attractive places that a tourist should visit in my city are Hafez and Saadi tomb ( they are the most famous poet in Iran), Persepolis ( this place is very good for who wants to know about Iranian culture) and etc. Shiraz also has nice weather. you can enjoy your time whenever you go out . Shirazian people are so nice and they respect all the people, specially, foreign people. So, I recommend all tourist to visit my city, they can have good time during their vacation.
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Shiraz and Shirazian people

I would like to describe my city and people who are living in Shiraz. My city has many different places for tourist tourists. t(capitalize)he most attractive places that a tourist should visit in my city are Hafez and Saadi tomb the tombs of Hafez and Saadi  ( they are the most famous poet poets in Iran), Persepolis ( this place is very good for who wantswant to know about Iranian culture) and etc. Shiraz also has nice weather. y(capitalize)ou can enjoy your time whenever you go out .
Shirazian people are so nice and they respect all the people, specially especially   ,(remove) foreign people. So, I recommend  that all tourist tourists to(remove) visit my city,   "because", "so that", or "so" they can have good time during their vacation.

 

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