Kim Jeong Uk
A battle against wasps The toughest thing you face when you live in the rural area: insects. I dread wasps in particular. Yeah, that's right. Wasps. With their intimidating appearance, they even make bees look cute and not dangerous. Recently, I found that the number of wasps hovering around my front door was growing. It seems that a big wasp family has moved in. I couldn't stand that. That would damage my quality of life by scaring me, even if they don't sting me. So I bought a special spray designed to kill insects. I've already used it last summer. It did wonders. It is a surefire way to get rid of all kinds of insects. I sprayed it here and there around the door this evening. Hopefully I'll see them all lying on the ground dead next morning.
2015年7月28日 14:12
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A battle against wasps

The toughest thing you face when you live in a the rural area: are insects. I dread wasps in particular. Yeah, that's right. Wasps. With their intimidating appearance, they even make bees look cute and not dangerous. Recently, I found that the number of wasps hovering around my front door was growing. It seems that a big wasp family has moved in. I couldn't stand that. That would damage my quality of life by scaring me, even if they don't sting me. So I bought a special spray designed to kill insects. I've I already used it last summer. It did wonders. It is a surefire way to get rid of all kinds of insects. I sprayed it here and there around the door this evening. Hopefully I'll see them all lying dead on the ground dead next tomorrow morning.

2015年7月28日

A battle against wasps

The toughest thing you face when you live in a rural area: insects. I dread wasps in particular. Yeah, that's right. Wasps. With their intimidating appearance, they even make bees look cute and not dangerous safe. Recently, I found that the number of wasps hovering around my front door was growing. It seems that a big wasp family has moved in. I can't stand that. That would damage my quality of life by scaring, me even if they don't sting me. So I bought a special spray designed to kill insects. I've already used it last summer. It did wonders. It is a surefire way to get rid of all kinds of insects. I sprayed it here and there around the door this evening. Hopefully, I'll see them all lying on the ground dead tomorrow morning.

1) I disagree with the previous correction of your use of the colon. There is nothing wrong with it.

2) 'not dangerous' is cumbersome. 'safe' has the same meaning while being more concise.

3) Because you still cannot stand the wasps present, it should be present tense: can't.

4) I've already used it last summer, may actually be correct, but cumbersome and unusual. If you add 'once' that would also work: "I've already used it once last summer."

5) I also disagree with the previous correction in rewording your sentence to move dead. There is nothing wrong with where you had it at first.

6) You should use 'tomorrow' to describe the morning, noon, night or any other period of time during the following day.

 

2015年7月31日
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