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Giving up eating my rice

For Asians people, [Chinglish, 已经是人了, 多餘, 中文沒有这个涵意所以要加个 "人"] we almost eating rice is almost a daily affair. every day. Many people 只有人类才会这样 think our ancestors ate like this! that, So when I told them my compatriots that I was giving up eating my rice, they are were shocked, confused and even said I am crazy. Hahaha, I started to explain to them, just as I write it like here. Yes, our ancestors did eat rice, while but the rice is different. What they ate is called brown rice not the White rice the polished ones that we eat now. Brown rice and White rice They are so different in nature, one brown rice is rough and full of vitamins. while The other one is polished, smooth without all the vitamins removed. If your lifestyle is not a physical rigor,  don't move a lot and eating too much white rice and other white processed carbohydrates, you will have be lack of vitamins deficiency.  Not only this, and then it will rise your blood sugar, increase blood fat triglycerides will increase, damage and your pancreas will have problems... and so on. So giving up eating rice, you eat too much, Your body simply don't need it 不要用, 因為意思不清, 是对身体无益的问题还是身体不須要吃这么多的糖类 all these carbs. 

Just looking around us!  Refined carbs are  our environment, there  is white carbohydrate everywhere, white in the forms of polished rice, white rice based noodles, white cookies, carbonated drinks, sugars... Way too much for your bodies to handle! Stop feeding yourself body with these zero nutrient junk food. Zero nutrient food is never good for your health. , for your life! 多餘

Give up eating rice

For Asian people, we almost eat eat rice almost every day. Many people think our ancestors ate like that, so when I told them I was giving up eating rice, they are were shocked, confused, and even said I am was crazy. Hahaha, I started to explained to them, just as I write have written it here. Yes, our ancestors did eat rice, while but the rice is was different. What they ate is was called Brown rice, not the white rice that we eat now. Brown rice and white rice are so different. One is rough and full of vitamins, while the other one is polished, smooth, and without vitamins. If you don't move a lot and eating too much white rice and other white carbohydrates, you will be lacking of vitamins and then it will raise your blood sugar, increase blood fat, damage your pancreas and so on. So give up eating rice, you eat too much, your body dont doesn't need it!

Looking around our environment, there is are white carbohydrates everywhere: white rice, white noodles, white cookies, drinks, sugars... too much for your body! Stop feeding your body those that zero-nutrient junk food for your health, for your life!

Hehe I think I need to eat less rice too! Good job!