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TOEFL independent writing Since everyone is seeking success in their career, it’s important to find out what’s the essential ingredient of success. Someone believes that the ability to relate well to people is the most significant element to the success. Admittedly, getting along well with people can enlarge our friend cycle and give us more resources and chances to develop. However, without studying hard in the school,success in the future can not be guaranteed. So in my opinion, there is no better way to study hard in school than to reach the success. In order to gain the success in our future career, we must have solid knowledge of the field we choose. Under this circumstance, studying hard plays a pivotal role in the improvement of our background knowledge. Take myself as an example, my major is law in the university and I dream to be a lawyer in the future. As a good lawyer, it’s compulsory to know the law and the related case inside out. Attending the lectures and discussing with classmates on the law issue expand my horizon and help me understanding some law terms more thoroughly. If I didn’t do hard on my study, I think I will have no chance to become a lawyer. Another thing we can get from studying hard is the tenacity, which contributes to someone’s success. Spending plenty hours in the library on our study is definitely a difficult thing. But if we can indulge ourself in study and overcome the distraction and tiredness, we can cultivate our personality of perseverance. Once we can persistent in our study, we can also persistent in our work and defeat the troubles we may face in the future. So,studying hard in school do much good to our success. What’s more, we still can make friends when we study hard in the school.For example, the professors will give you some group assignments in the class. With the purpose of complete the schoolwork, you have to joint some discussion with your classmates. During the discussion, you can share some resources and experiences with others and exchange your opinions. It’s a good chance for us to meet some new friends. All in all, studying hard in school is a main driving force behind the success, which can give us the solid knowledge, cultivate our personality and ability of perseverance and even enlarge our current friend cycle.
2016年5月4日 13:54
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Very well done. My corrections are minor. =)
2016年5月4日

TOEFL independent writing

Since everyone is seeking success in their career, it’s important to find out what’s the essential ingredient of success. Someone believes that the ability to relate well to people is the most significant element to the success. Admittedly, getting along well with people can enlarge our circle of friends cycle  and give us more resources and chances to develop. However, without studying hard in the school, success in the future can not be guaranteed. So in my opinion, there is no better way to study hard in school than to reach the  for success.
In order to gain the success in our future career, we must have solid knowledge of the field we choose. Under this circumstance, studying hard plays a pivotal role in the improvement of our background knowledge. Take myself as an example, my major is law in the university and I dream to be a lawyer in the future. As a good lawyer, it’s compulsory to know the law and the related cases inside out. Attending the lectures and discussing with classmates on the law issue expands my horizon and helps me understanding some law terms more thoroughly. If I don't didn’t do word hard on my study studies, I think I will have no chance to become a lawyer.
Another thing we can get from studying hard is the tenacity, which contributes to someone’s success. Spending plenty of hours in the library on our study is definitely a difficult thing. But if we can engage indulge ourself ourselves in study and overcome the distraction and tiredness, we can cultivate our personality of perseverance. Once we can persistent in our study, we can also be persistent in our work and defeat the troubles we may face in the future. So, studying hard in school does much good to for our success.
What’s more, we still can make friends when we study hard in the school. For example, the professors will give you some group assignments in the class. With the purpose of complete the schoolwork, you have to joint some discussion with your classmates. During the discussion, you can share some resources and experiences with others and exchange your opinions. It’s a good chance for us to meet some new friends.
All in all, studying hard in school is a main driving force behind the success, which can give us the solid knowledge, cultivate our personality and ability of perseverance and even enlarge our current friend cycle.
2016年5月4日
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