The forth diary Today is sunny.I felt the first soft wind of spring touch my face.I want to read and listen to the music in the sun.But people living in the world always have a lot of things to do.Wha

The forth fourth ["forth" refers to moving forward] diary

Today is sunny. I felt the first soft wind of spring touch my face. I want to read and listen to the ["The" music would refer to some specific music, like if there were a concert outside. You would need to have already mentioned this music/concert for it to make sense. If you are just listening to any music on your phone, for example, do not use "the."] music in the sun. But people living in the world always have a lot of things to do. Whatever you want and don't want it. Whether you like it or not, you must faced face it! ["Whether you (something) or not" is a very common expression. "Whether" is useful when comparing two uncertain possibilities like this. "It" in your sentence is not clear in what it refers to. "Face" should be used instead of "faced" because you are speaking about the present.]
Ok. Maybe I should wrote write [using past tense instead of present again] some things about in my living my life. ["About" is a preposition, which should always refer to a noun or pronoun. "About in my living" is a very awkward phrase. "About my life" makes it clear that "life" is the noun "about" refers to.]
In the evening, I went to surpermaket the supermarket [The word "supermarket" needs an article ("a," "an," or "the"). People will usually say "the," but "a" could also work as long as you are not talking about a specific supermarket, like if there were only one of them in your town.] with my friend. We bought a lot of food and articles for daily use.

General note: Putting spaces between your sentences would make your writing much more comfortable to read.

Sorry if I wrote too much! I just thought saying "this is wrong" would not be helpful unless I explained why. Here you can see the corrected text without my comments.

The fourth diary

Today is sunny. I felt the first soft wind of spring touch my face. I want to read and listen to music in the sun. But people living in the world always have a lot of things to do. Whether you like it or not, you must face it!

Ok. Maybe I should write some things about my life. In the evening, I went to the supermarket with my friend. We bought a lot of food and articles for daily use.

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