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Should students be required to take physical education? Physical training is important. I finally realized that when I turned to the age of 30. In the past 30 years, I ate and slept a lot, to order keep myself healthy. I barely did any physical practice. My school had a physical lesson, but it was just a very simple exercise, and every one include my teachers thought that it was a waste of time. I thought I had a very bad reflexes so I refused to do any more training. When I was young, I didn’t feel any problem, but as time passed, I always felt tired although I still ate and slept a lot, Fortunately, I am the person who had difficulty to get fat, so I wasn’t worry about my appearance, but I often had a cold and I was lack of blood. I believed I wasn’t a healthy person. Then, I knew that was needed, it was physical practice. Physical practice is necessary to turn foods into the nourishment, burn off unneeded calories. It promote the metabolism, put away the old, toxic things out of the body through sweat. It keeps the muscles active and the heart staying well. Physical practice doesn’t only keep people be healthy but also beauty and young. It reliefs stress and help people keep a good balance of the mind. Physical practice is especially important for the young people in the age of school. It is necessary to growing young people to build a supple body. It will help young people to be strong enough, physically and mentally before coming out to the complicated society and working hardly. Math or physics is not really helpful after graduating from the school, but a healthy strong body and mind will be a great help. I think students should be required to take physical education. Young people who like playing sports or know that physical practice is important may do it. But some body, like me in the past, may not. If the school request all the student to take the physical education, no one would regret of not having done any physical practices like me.
2019年2月22日 02:31
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Should students be required to take physical education?

Physical training is important. I finally realized that when I turned 30. In the past 30 years, I ate and slept a lot, in order keep myself healthy. I barely did any physical exercise. My school had a physical education lesson, but it was just very simple exercise, and everyone, including my teachers, thought that it was a waste of time. I thought I had a very bad reflexes so I refused to do any more training.

When I was young, I didn’t feel any problem, but as time passed, I always felt tired although I still ate and slept a lot, Fortunately, I am the type of person who doesn't put on weight, so I wasn’t worried about my appearance, but I often had a cold (and I was lack of blood?). I believed I wasn’t a healthy person. Then, I knew what was needed, it was physical practice.
Physical practice is necessary to turn foods into the nourishment and burn off unneeded calories. It promotes the metabolism, gets rid of the old, toxic things from  the body through sweat. It keeps the muscles active and the heart strong. Physical exercise doesn’t only keep people healthy but also beautiful and young. It relieves stress and helps people keep a healthy mind.
Physical exercise is especially important for young people of school age. It is necessary for growing young people to build a supple body. It will help them to be strong enough, physically and mentally before entering complicated society and working hard. Math or physics is not really helpful after graduating from school, but a healthy strong body and mind will be a great help.
I think students should be required to take physical education. Young people who like playing sports or know that physical practice is important may do it. But somebody, like me in the past, may not. If the school makes all the students take physical education, no one would regret not having done any physical exercise like I do.

Hello Thao,

This is a nice essay with lots of good arguments. In some places you chose the wrong form of the word and in other places there were grammar agreement mistakes, possibly because you don't need grammar agreements in Vietnamese!

One part in blue, I really couldn't get the sense of.

Best wishes

2019年2月22日
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