It is a very convenient and quick way for the customers to shopping. You just need to choose the products you want online, then click some buttons, after two or three days you will receive the goods you bought. If you’re too busy to wait the goods at home, you could also choose to take your goods in the convenince stores and pay for it.
When you’re buying stuff on the Internet, it’s easier to compare the prices, then you don’t have to spend lots of time to go to different stores. Also, you can even see the customers’ comments on some Websites.
However, there're also many scamming on the online shopping, you should be careful. Otherwise, it’s harder to buy some stuff online, such as clothes, shoes, etc.
For me, online shopping has became a part of my daily life. I hope everyone could use this event on the right way and enjoy the convenience it gives us.
- In many places, I'm not sure how to express it in English. So it is fine to do some big changes to make the sentence smooth. Thank you for the help!!
[Writing practice 2] Online Shopping
Have you ever tried to buy something on the Internet? Due to the world changed fast, In a fast changing world [or simply, "Nowadays"], almost everyone have has a smart phone with internet service,, mMore and more people like to buying [or "like to buy"] the products on the Internet.It is a very convenient and quick way for the customers to shopping. You just need to choose the products you want online, then click some buttons,. aAfter two or three days, you will receive the goods you bought. If you’re too busy to wait for the goods at home, you could also choose to take pick up your goods in the a convenience stores and pay for it there.
When you’re buying stuff on the Internet, it’s easiery to compare the prices,. tThen you don’t have to spend lots of time to go going to different stores. Also, you can even see the customers’ comments on some Wwebsites.
However, there're also many scammings on the online shopping stores, and you should be careful. Otherwise, it’s harder to buy some stuff online, such as clothes, shoes, etc. [I don't quite understand this sentence. I assume "otherwise" refers to "if you are not careful." It would make more sense to say something like "If you are not careful, you might not receive the items you ordered, receive poor quality items, or suffer identity theft."]
For me, online shopping has became a part of my daily life. I hope everyone could use this event service [or "method"] on in the right way and enjoy the convenience it gives us.
- In many places, I'm not sure how to express it in English. So it is fine to do some big changes to make the sentence smooth. Thank you for the help!!
Some suggestions:
1. Don't string sentences together by commas. It is more straightforward to have separate sentences (In my opinion).
2. Use either gerund ("You have to send a lot of time going to different stores") or infinitive ("You have to send a lot of time to go to different stores"). It is not correct to say "to going".
Keep up the good work!
[Writing practice 2] Online Shopping
Have you ever tried to buy something on the Internet? Due to the fast changing world, almost everyone has a smart phone with internet service. Because of this easy access, more and more people like to buy products on the Internet.It is a very convenient and quick way for customers to shop. You just need to choose the products you want online, click the purchase button, and after two or three days you will receive the goods you bought. If you need the goods right away, you could also choose to pick up what you bought at the convenience store and pay for it there.
When you’re buying stuff on the Internet it’s easier to compare the prices. This way you don’t have to spend lots of time going to different stores. Also, you can even read customer reviews on some websites.
However, there are also many online shopping scams. You must be careful, otherwise, you could fall for a scam. This makes it harder to buy some stuff online, such as clothes, shoes, etc.
For me, online shopping has became a part of my daily life. I hope everyone can use this technology in the right way and enjoy the convenience it gives us.
- In many places, I'm not sure how to express it in English. So it is fine to do some big changes to make the sentence smooth. Thank you for the help!!
