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I love to eat pizza 🍕. Because when I feel happy, I used to eat pizza. It make me more happy. I feel lighter, relaxed and energetic.
2023年4月1日 18:45
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"I love to eat pizza 🍕 because it makes me happy. Whenever I feel happy, I tend to eat pizza. It makes me feel even happier, lighter, more relaxed, and energetic."
The second sentence has a minor error where it says "I used to eat pizza" instead of "I tend to eat pizza." This error suggests that you no longer eat pizza, which contradicts the first sentence where you say you love to eat pizza. The third sentence is a bit repetitive because it uses the word "happy" twice in the same sentence. I have revised the sentence to make it more concise and less repetitive. The fourth sentence is good but it can be improved by adding "even" before "happier" to emphasize that pizza makes you feel happier than you already are. The fifth sentence is well-written and effectively conveys the positive effects that pizza has on you.
2023年4月1日
I love eating pizza because it makes me happy. When I'm feeling down, eating pizza can cheer me up. It makes me feel lighter, more relaxed, and energized.
I made a few minor changes to improve the grammar and wording of the text. Instead of saying "I used to eat pizza," which implies that the person no longer eats pizza, I changed it to "I love eating pizza." Also, to make the sentence flow better, I changed "It make me more happy" to "It makes me happy." Finally, I added some additional details to the sentence to give it more depth.
2023年4月8日
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I love to eat pizza 🍕. Because when I feel happy, I used to eat pizza. It make
me more happy. I feel lighter, relaxed and energetic.
2023年4月1日
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