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In woods was dwelling an odd man. He was alone because most of all, he loathed to talk. Moreover, he taked part to a weird worship based of the famous Necrominicon described by Lovecraft. Sometimes, when people got closed to his home, they could hear some vague words pronounced in an uncanny language. By all accounts, this man was well-nigh eighty and was still as stiff as an old branch. His face was terribly scared by time, like James Cook certainly was after his long journey near the "Terra Australis", the skin more and more digged steadily by sun. By paying attention, we could notice that his treads was midly irregular.
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In the woods was dwelling there dwelt/lived an odd man.Past simple (there dwelt / lived) sounds better here. 'Lived' is the more common word, 'dwelt' sounds more like this genre of writing.
He was alone because most of all, he loathed to talking. Moreover, he took part in a weird worship based on the famous Necrominicon described by Lovecraft.
Sometimes, when people got close(d) to his home, they could hear some vague words pronounced in an uncanny language. By all accounts, this man was well-nigh eighty and was still as stiff as an old branch. His face was terribly scared by time, like James Cook certainly was after his long journey near the "Terra Australis", the his skin more and more wrinkled/furrowed steadily by the sun.
By paying attention, we could notice that his treads were mildly irregular.
I'm not sure what you mean by this sentence - 'treads'? - Do you mean the way that he walked? Tread for 'pas' sounds a bit unusual in this sense in English. It might be: By paying close attention, we could see that his strides were slightly irregular, but I'm not sure if that's what you mean.
A great character description, using great language. I enjoyed reading it. If you need any more explanations, please don't hesitate to ask me!
Leigh
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