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IELTS writing topic Subject: International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country that they visited. Do Advantages outweigh the disadvantages My answer: By traveling to the other countries we find so many interesting things for ourselves. Actually, when people visit other countries, they are familiar with new cultures and find new international friends. Moreover, for the countries which will be visited by travelers, it’s good for their economy. In this essay, I’m going tell more details about all advantages of traveling. First of all and which is more important, people will see new cultures. In the other word, they self-developing their self by visiting new countries. In addition, they are going to find new friends. I think new friends give us new opportunities developing ourselves. For example, by talking with new people we can find something new for ourselves. Also, we can improve our English or other languages which are really important for being the successful person. Actually, by learning new languages we train our brain and improve our logical skills. The second, by visiting new countries we increase the economy of the countries. When people travel to the other countries, they bring money to the place where they are going to visit. Actually, it’s a good chance when countries have so many travelers “ more visitor, more money”. Therefore, those countries will reach a good economy. But of course, the economy of the countries not only depends on the number of visitors. However, they could be a good possibility for each country. In conclusion, I would like to emphasize advantages of traveling is more than disadvantages. All reasons which were mentioned are great positive events that could happen. However, we should keep in mind that everything depends on us. I mean, we can find some nice friends or meet with new culture only on that time when we really want that. So, the more important thing is we should know what exactly we want and go through the goal.

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IELTS writing topic

Subject: International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country that they visited. Do Advantages outweigh the disadvantages
My answer:
By traveling to the other countries, we find so many interesting things for ourselves. Actually, when people visit other countries, they can become familiar with new cultures and find make new international friends. Moreover, [for countries that accommodate travelers / for host countries], tourists / travelers can stimulate their economy. In this essay, I’m going tell more details about all advantages of traveling. [Good introduction. You might try to be more explicit about your position in relation to the questions, so: When it comes to travel, I think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages... In this essay, I will discuss two advantages to travel in greater detail].

First of all, travel allows people to experience new cultures. In the other word, they self-developing their self by visiting new countries [Do you mean that experiencing new cultures allows one to learn more about themselves? You should develop this connection]. In addition, they can make new friends. I think new friends give us present us with new opportunities to developing ourselves. For example, by talking with new people we can find something new for about ourselves. [OK, now you've made the connection with travel and self-development, but if you write "in addition", it gives the sense that you are moving to a new idea] Also, we can the local languages which are really important if one wants to be successful today. [How so?] Additionally, by learning new languages we develop our brains and improve our logical skills.[How so?] 

The second, by visiting new countries we increase the economy of the countries [ you can also try: travelers can contribute to a country's economic well-being]. When people travel to the other countries, they bring money to the place where they are going to visit. It’s a good chance when countries have so many travelers “ more visitor, more money” [avoid "actually", it takes away the emphasis from the content of the sentence]. Therefore, those countries can benefit economically. Of course, the a country's economy should not only depends on.the income from tourists, but host countries should not overlook the benefits offers by travelers.

In conclusion, I would like to emphasize the advantages of traveling over the disadvantages. [All reasons which were mentioned are great positive events that could happen]. However, we should keep in mind that everything depends on us.

[Good work. Too long so I had to cut. Try to be more descriptive with examples. Tell a good story.]

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