Luiza
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Hello everyone, I want to turn it into an Advanced English text. Please, professional teachers or native, help me as soon as possible !!! ✨👇🏻‼️ "I am Helen, last Summer holidays, I went with my family to Paris. We went by car. There was me, my parents, my brother Tom and my little sister Susan. We live in Brighton and we are English. We saw the most interesting places in Paris, as the Eiffel Tower, the Louvre Museum and we made the city tour. On the fifth day we went to Euro Disney. That was fantastic. We all enjoyed ourselves a lot. We stayed in Euro Disney four days. They were the most exciting days I had all my life. We were all very tired because we had to walk a lot to watch everything and enjoy all the amusements. My sister is only 4 years old and she loved it. We stayed at a hotel inside Euro Disney."
2022년 3월 29일 오후 8:39
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Hello everyone, I want to turn it into an Advanced English text. Please, professional teachers or native, help me as soon as possible !!! ✨👇🏻‼️ "I'm Helen and last summer my family and I went to Paris on holiday. Myself, my parents, my brother Tom and my little sister Susan travelledby car feom Brighton. We saw all the most interesting places in Paris, the Eiffel Tower, the Louvre Museum and we toured the whole city. On the fifth day we went to Euro Disney. That was fantasticand we all enjoyed ourselves a lot. We stayed in Euro Disney for four days. They were the most exciting days of my entire life but it was also very tiring because we had to walk a lot to see everything and enjoy all the amusements. My sister is only 4 years old and she loved it. We stayed at a hotel in the Euro Disney park."
Finally!!!! It was quite good, I made a few small corrections and paraphrased a bit to make it more natural
2022년 3월 29일
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