Angie
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During my summer vacation, while I tried to get to sleep I came up an idea. That idea came from a desire that I had since a long time which was to eat something new at dinner. My family is used to make arepa both to breakfast and to dinner and that made me very bored. So I had the fantastic idea to make bread for dinner, however it wasn't so fantastic at the beginnig as I learnt that task that I had impose to myself wasn't very easy at all. Nevertheless I really enjoy making bread and the best of all I found a new hobbie on it.
2024年12月28日 02:09
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During my summer vacation, as I was trying to fall asleep, I came up with an idea. The idea stemmed from a long-standing desire I had: to eat something new for dinner. My family is used to making arepas for both breakfast and dinner, which had started to bore me. So, I had the fantastic idea to make bread for dinner. However, it didn’t seem so fantastic at first, as I quickly realized the task I had set for myself wasn’t easy at all. Nevertheless, I really enjoyed making bread, and best of all, I discovered a new hobby in the process.
This is a lovely and personal story! You've done a great job sharing your thoughts and experiences in a relatable way. It’s clear that making bread was not only a fun activity but also a meaningful accomplishment for you. Tip: Pay attention to verb forms and prepositions (e.g., "came up an idea" → "came up with an idea" or "impose to myself" → "imposed on myself"). These small adjustments make your writing sound more natural. Keep experimenting with new ideas—both in writing and in life!
2024年12月28日
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Help me correct this text please
During my summer vacation, while I was trying to get some sleep I came up with an idea. That idea came from a desire (that) I have been having for a long time now and which is to eat something new for dinner. My family is used to make arepa for both breakfast and dinner and that made me feel very bored. So I had the fantastic idea to make bread for dinner, however it wasn't so fantastic in the beginning as I was learning how to make it which was something I had impose to myself and it wasn't easy at all. Nevertheless I really enjoy making bread and the best of all is that I turned it into a new hobby.
2024年12月28日
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