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Today was my friend’s birthday, so we celebrated at karaoke at midnight. We bought donuts and mini cupcakes at MUJI and decorated them. It was very cute and fun. After that, I slept for about one and a half hours. We left the karaoke at 5:00 a.m. Now, we walked for 50 minutes and came to a family restaurant. After that, we will go to Shibuya to see Aimyon. I am very excited and I hope I have a great day.
2026年7月23日 22:24
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Today was my friend’s birthday, so we celebrated at karaoke at midnight. We bought doughnuts and mini cupcakes at MUJI and decorated them. They looked very cute, and we had a lot of fun.
After that, I slept for about an hour and a half. We left the karaoke at 5:00 a.m. Then, we walked for 50 minutes and arrived at a family restaurant.
After that, we’re going to Shibuya to see Aimyon. I’m very excited, and I hope I have a great day.
Level: C1.
Your writing is fluent and engaging. You describe the celebration clearly, and the sequence of events is easy to follow. The only improvements were a few more natural expressions and a small correction to the time sequence. Excellent work! 😊
2026年7月23日 22:46
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