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In my opinion, children would face various problems when going online. First of all, there are many opportunities to get acquainted with people. However, unfortunately, all people are not necessarily good.Some people try to deceive vulnerable people, such as elderly people and children.At worst, a child might become friends with a bad person online. If they meet face to face ,the bad person might try to kidnap the child. Also, too much Internet use could cause problems in the future.It is believed that using the Internet, especially playing games, is highly addictive. If people become addicted to the Internet, they can not carry on their normal life. As for children, they might not be able to go to school and study.As a result,it would be difficult for them to find a job when they grow up.

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In my opinion, children face various problems when going online. First of all, there are many opportunities to get acquainted with people. Unfortunately, all people are not necessarily good.Some people try to deceive vulnerable people, such as elderly people and children.At worst, a child might become friends with a bad person online. If they meet face to face ,the bad person might try to kidnap the child. Also, too much Internet use could cause problems in the future.It is believed that using the Internet, especially playing games, is highly addictive. If people become addicted to the Internet, they can not carry on with their normal lives. As for children, they might not be able to go to school and study.As a result,it would be difficult for them to find a job when they grow up.
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In my opinion, children face various problems when going online. First of all, there are many opportunities to get acquainted with people. However, unfortunately, not all people are necessarily good. Some people try to deceive vulnerable people, such as the elderly and children. At worst, a child might become friends with a bad person online. If they meet face to face, the bad person might try to kidnap the child. Also, too much Internet use could cause problems in the future. It is believed that using the Internet, especially playing games, is highly addictive. If people become addicted to the Internet, they can not carry on their normal life. As for children, they might not be able to go to school and study. As a result,it would be difficult for them to find a job when they grow up.
Expansion:The Internet provides many opportunities for children to make friends with people from all over the world who share the same hobbies and interests. However, unfortunately, not all people are necessarily good. There are criminals online who deceive vulnerable people such as the elderly and children, and a child might become friends with such a bad person. In the very worst cases children might even meet face to face with the danger of abuse or kidnap. As well as the danger posed by other people online, simply too much Internet use can cause problems in a child’s future. It is believed that using the Internet, especially playing games, is highly addictive. If people become addicted to the Internet, they can not carry on their normal life. For children, they might not be able to go to school, or if they do attend they might not be able to study well. As a result, it would be difficult for them to find a job when they grow up.
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In my opinion, children face various problems when going online. First of all, there are many opportunities to get acquainted with people. However, unfortunately, all people are not necessarily good. Some people try to deceive vulnerable people, such as the elderly and children. At worst, a child might become friends with a bad person online. If they meet face to face, the bad person might try to kidnap the child. Also, too much Internet use could cause problems in the future. It is believed that using the Internet, especially playing games, is highly addictive. If people become addicted to the Internet, they cannot carry on with their normal life. As for children, they might not be able to go to school and study. As a result,it would be difficult for them to find a job when they grow up.
Great composition! "elderly people" is correct. We can also say "the elderly". I recommend "the elderly" because you used "people" twice in that sentence. 🙂

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